Silverobama
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Hi teachers,
Please help me to correct the following italic short paragraph to make it natural and idiomatic:
I watched an hour-long video about the Song dynasty's greatest scholar Sushi* and it touched me to the soul. The video is about his whole life: his dreams, his aspirations, his sufferings, and most importantly, how he struggled to face the frames** forced/embedded by his political enemies*** and finally reborn under those miserable circumstances.**** When I was younger, I used to believe that the poets and articles I'd learned were his whole life.*****
*: No the Japanese borrowed word but Pinyin spelling of the greatest poet, scholar in China's history.
**&***&****: The video talked about the whole life of Sushi. When he was and how his father taught him and his younger brother things and how the took the imperial exams and finally became government officials. Because Sushi was a great writer and read many books, many people were jealous of him. Then his political opponents or enemies started cooking up things to frame him. He was jailed and almost tortured to death but finally saved. Sushi was sad and lost soon after he was released from jail, but later he began to rethink what had happened him (after reading some books written by a greatest thinker in China's history) and finally realized that he should live in the moment and learn from all those sufferings. He was reborn from his pain and sufferings to become another person.
*****: I used to firmly believe that the poets and articles I learned about anicent people about all are about him because when I was at school, we just learned and the teacher didn't share the stories of them with us, just learn and read and memorize, but now we can watch videoes and read more books about these people, I've learned more about them and therefore respect them.
Please take your time.
Much appreciated!
Please help me to correct the following italic short paragraph to make it natural and idiomatic:
I watched an hour-long video about the Song dynasty's greatest scholar Sushi* and it touched me to the soul. The video is about his whole life: his dreams, his aspirations, his sufferings, and most importantly, how he struggled to face the frames** forced/embedded by his political enemies*** and finally reborn under those miserable circumstances.**** When I was younger, I used to believe that the poets and articles I'd learned were his whole life.*****
*: No the Japanese borrowed word but Pinyin spelling of the greatest poet, scholar in China's history.
**&***&****: The video talked about the whole life of Sushi. When he was and how his father taught him and his younger brother things and how the took the imperial exams and finally became government officials. Because Sushi was a great writer and read many books, many people were jealous of him. Then his political opponents or enemies started cooking up things to frame him. He was jailed and almost tortured to death but finally saved. Sushi was sad and lost soon after he was released from jail, but later he began to rethink what had happened him (after reading some books written by a greatest thinker in China's history) and finally realized that he should live in the moment and learn from all those sufferings. He was reborn from his pain and sufferings to become another person.
*****: I used to firmly believe that the poets and articles I learned about anicent people about all are about him because when I was at school, we just learned and the teacher didn't share the stories of them with us, just learn and read and memorize, but now we can watch videoes and read more books about these people, I've learned more about them and therefore respect them.
Please take your time.
Much appreciated!
