Correction of errors

[Philemon Gedzie-Dunyoh]

Help me with editing the following
At sixty,the director prevailed on his deputy to retire

 

[tedmc]

Help me with editing the following
At sixty,the director prevailed on his deputy to retire

Prevailed on is not the right phrase. I would use persuaded.

 

[Tdol]

Who was sixty?

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Help me with editing the following:

At sixty, [space] the director prevailed on his deputy to retire.

Welcome, Phil!

Tdol asks a good question. The director's age should not be the issue. Do you see the problem? Can you think of a way to rephrase?

ALWAYS punctuate the ends of sentences.

 

[emsr2d2]

Please help me [STRIKE]with editing[/STRIKE] to edit/correct the following sentence.

At sixty, space here the director prevailed on his deputy to retire.

Welcome to the forum. :hi:

Please note my corrections above.

1. Just saying "Help me" is impolite. You need to say "Please".
2. Ask people to help you "to + verb" or "with + noun/pronoun".
3. End every sentence with an appropriate punctuation mark.
4. Put a space after every comma, full stop, question mark and exclamation mark.

Your sentence is unclear. As Tdol pointed out, using "At sixty, the director ..." means that the director was sixty, not the deputy. As tedmc said, "prevailed on" (note that it's usually "prevail upon") is the wrong choice. Perhaps you mean "persuaded" or "encouraged".

Did you write this sentence yourself or did you find it somewhere?