Diary entry - Recently, I've been following an adorable, fluffy Chow Chow dog

[Maybo]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Recently, I've been following an adorable, fluffy Chow Chow dog on Instagram. I like it when he's running like a bouncing ball. It's really cute! He reminds me of my grandmother's cute dog, BB. Years ago, I visited my grandmother and met this dog. That was the first time I had a close contact with an animal. I still remember the first day when I got off the bike, the dog kept sniffing me, and I was scared that he would bite me. On the next few days, I wanted to be friends with him so I played with him. We had good times. I hoped he could recognise me the next time I visited him but unfortunately he had died of heart attack.

 

[emsr2d2]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Recently, I've been following an adorable, fluffy Chow Chow dog on Instagram. I like it when he's [STRIKE]running[/STRIKE] bouncing [around] like a [STRIKE]bouncing[/STRIKE] [rubber] ball. It's really cute! He reminds me of my grandmother's [STRIKE]cute[/STRIKE] gorgeous dog, BB. Years ago, I visited my grandmother and met [STRIKE]this[/STRIKE] her dog. That was the first time I had [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] been in close contact with an animal. I still remember the [STRIKE]the first[/STRIKE] that one day when I got off [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] my bike, the dog kept sniffing me no comma here and I was scared that he would bite me. [STRIKE]On[/STRIKE] Over/During the next few days, I played with him because I wanted to be friends with him. [STRIKE]so I played with him.[/STRIKE] We had good times. I hoped he [STRIKE]could[/STRIKE] would recognise/remember me the next time I visited [STRIKE]him[/STRIKE] but unfortunately, by then, he had died of a heart attack.

Please see my changes above. I changed the second "cute" to "gorgeous" because "cute" was used twice in close proximity.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Please see my changes above. I changed the second "cute" to "gorgeous" because "cute" was used twice in close proximity.

And some would say that's two too many — like my high school English teacher Miss Warren, who called cute "the great American virtue."

 

[tedmc]

I would change we had good times to we had a good time.

 

[emsr2d2]

I would change we had good times to we had a good time.

I considered that but I left it as it was because it referred to the multiple times they played together "over the next few days".