Diary entry - Today, I checked my tomatoes to see if they were fine

[Maybo]

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Today, I checked my tomatoes to see if they were fine, and I found two of them had ripened! Some were yellow and turning to red, while others remained green. I took some photos of them and showed them to my friends, and I said, "I'm a junior farmer now! Haha!" In the past I successfully grew some plants, such as watermelons, cucumbers and pumpkins. My friends saw them and asked me if I'd like to be a farmer. I said I didn't have money to buy a piece of land. Then, one of my friends said she was also interested in farming and suggested renting a piece of land together. I rejected because I bet she would quit very quickly.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Today, I checked my tomatoes to see if they were healthy/doing well/in good shape, and I found two of them had ripened! Some were yellow and turning [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] red, while others remained green. I took some photos of them and showed them to my friends, and I said, "I'm a junior farmer now! Haha!" In the past I successfully grew some plants, such as watermelons, cucumbers and pumpkins. My friends saw them and asked me if I'd like to be a farmer. I said I didn't have money to buy a piece of land. Then, one of my friends said she was also interested in farming and suggested renting a piece of land together. I rejected the idea because I bet she would quit very quickly.

It's good.

 

[emsr2d2]

I'd say "I successfully grew some fruits and vegetables, such as ...", not "I successfully grew some plants".

 

[Tdol]

How about to see how they were coming on/doing?

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

How about to see how they were coming on/doing?

In the U.S., we wouldn't say "coming on." That means flirting. We would say "coming along."

And "doing" is also good.

 

[Tdol]

Along works in BrE too.