Diary entry - Today, I discussed "snow" with my friends.

[Maybo]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Today, I discussed "snow" with my friends. Many of them have seen the snow. As far as I could remember, I haven't seen any, but my mother said I had seen once in Shanghai at the age of 3 or 4. She said I liked to move the snow into house and got everything wet. I can't recall that memory completely. How come I forgot such an important natural scene in my life? When I was a child, I really wanted to see the snow, so I even pretended the ice stuck on the inside of the refrigerator was snow.

 

[Tdol]

Into the house, surely?

 

[teechar]

Many of them have seen [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] snow. As far as I could remember, I haven't seen any, but my mother said I had seen snow once in Shanghai at the age of 3 or 4. She said I [STRIKE]liked to move the snow[/STRIKE] brought some into the house and got everything wet, but I can't [STRIKE]recall[/STRIKE] really remember that. [STRIKE]memory completely.[/STRIKE] How [STRIKE]come I forgot[/STRIKE] could I forget such an important [STRIKE]natural scene in[/STRIKE] memory from my childhood? [STRIKE]life?[/STRIKE] When I was a child, I really wanted to see [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] snow, so I even pretended the ice stuck on the inside of the refrigerator was snow.

Ice is hard and smooth (like glass). Perhaps you meant "frost" instead.

 

[tedmc]

as far as I can remember?

I saw snow in Shanghai at the age of three or four?

 

[teechar]

as far as I can remember?

I saw snow in Shanghai at the age of three or four?

Those are not necessary. There is nothing wrong with the original parts.

 

[emsr2d2]

As far as I can remember, I haven't seen snow.
As far as I could remember, I hadn't seen snow.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

Ice is hard and smooth (like glass). Perhaps you meant "frost" instead.

I've had ice build up in old refrigerators. You have to take out all the food and unplug it for a day or two.

But you're right, it doesn't look like snow. It's ice, and it looks like ice.

 

[Tdol]

I had one of those fridges when I was living in Manila- you would have to unplug it and hammer the the stuff and chuck it in the sink.