rodgers white
Senior Member
- Joined
- Jan 17, 2016
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- English Teacher
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- Chinese
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- China
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- China
Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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Lili and Laohu smiled knowingly at each other. Lili said, “We have lost our prey, you two need to keep your minds on the task at hand; if you can’t, we’ll have to train you separately. Can you keep your minds on the work or not?”
Qingmei and Yang nodded. From that moment on, whenever they were training or hunting together, they concentrated on the hunt or the lesson. Yang, remembering what Laohu and Weifeng did at the beginning of their relationship, arranged to meet Qingmei at the market whenever possible. From there, during those short but meaningful rendezvous, their relationship grew.
At the market, Lanhua’s informative wink to her parents was enough for the moment but seeing Qingmei scamper off when they saw his family approaching was a bit of a giveaway. “Wasn’t that your friend that trains with you?”
Gan asked. Before Yang could answer, his mother said, “She seems like a nice girl you should invite her over some time.”
Yang replied. “Yeahhh, she is nice, mom. Maybe I will ask her over…one day.” Lanhua hid her amused expressions by feigning an interest in some dolls at a stall. She had stopped playing with dolls long ago, but no one noticed how out of place it was.
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Lili and Laohu smiled knowingly at each other. Lili said, “We have lost our prey, you two need to keep your minds on the task at hand; if you can’t, we’ll have to train you separately. Can you keep your minds on the work or not?”
Qingmei and Yang nodded. From that moment on, whenever they were training or hunting together, they concentrated on the hunt or the lesson. Yang, remembering what Laohu and Weifeng did at the beginning of their relationship, arranged to meet Qingmei at the market whenever possible. From there, during those short but meaningful rendezvous, their relationship grew.
At the market, Lanhua’s informative wink to her parents was enough for the moment but seeing Qingmei scamper off when they saw his family approaching was a bit of a giveaway. “Wasn’t that your friend that trains with you?”
Gan asked. Before Yang could answer, his mother said, “She seems like a nice girl you should invite her over some time.”
Yang replied. “Yeahhh, she is nice, mom. Maybe I will ask her over…one day.” Lanhua hid her amused expressions by feigning an interest in some dolls at a stall. She had stopped playing with dolls long ago, but no one noticed how out of place it was.