HELP !! Does it sound about " the salary and revenue"OK?

[montoya lee]

Please check the line below:

"The salary is how much you are valued by a company, the revenue is how much you deserve in a commercial world."

Does it sound Ok with you? or give me some advice.

 

[tedmc]

Why do you use the definite article for "salary" and "revenue".
Those are run-on sentences you have written, which require a semi-colon or a period in between.

 

[DeanCole]

Please check the line below:

"The salary is how much you are valued by a company, the revenue is how much you deserve in a commercial world."

Does it sound Ok with you? or give me some advice.

No 'the' in front of 'salary' and 'revenue'.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

HELP! Does what I say about "salary and revenue" sound OK?

Please check the line below:

"Salary is how much you are valued by a company. Revenue is how much you deserve in a commercial world."

Does it sound okay to you? Give me some advice.

The first sentence makes sense, as long as you're just speaking figuratively. (Literally, it's how much you're paid, not valued.)

I'm not sure about the second sentence. Are you being figurative again? Revenue is what a company actually receives, not what it deserves to receive. I'm not sure that companies deserve to receive anything in a competitive world.

So tell us more!

 

[montoya lee]

The first sentence makes sense, as long as you're just speaking figuratively. (Literally, it's how much you're paid, not valued.)

I'm not sure about the second sentence. Are you being figurative again? Revenue is what a company actually receives, not what it deserves to receive. I'm not sure that companies deserve to receive anything in a competitive world.

So tell us more!

How about:" The salary is how much you are paid by a company, the income is how much you can make by all your means."

 

[montoya lee]

The first sentence makes sense, as long as you're just speaking figuratively. (Literally, it's how much you're paid, not valued.)

I'm not sure about the second sentence. Are you being figurative again? Revenue is what a company actually receives, not what it deserves to receive. I'm not sure that companies deserve to receive anything in a competitive world.

So tell us more!

or " The salary is how much you are paid by a company, the income is how much you can make by all your means."

 

[teechar]

Your salary is what your employer pays you, whereas your income is how much you earn in total.

 

[emsr2d2]

Your title should have been "Does 'the salary and revenue' sound OK?"