I hadn't even taken four steps when

[NamelessKing]

Are my sentences correct?

I hadn't even taken four steps when I heard a shotgun being loaded. I turned to my left and spotted a colossal human shadow that uttered "Get off my land". I squeaked and bolted.

 

[Rover_KE]

NamelessKing, please post threads for editing in this forum rather than Ask a Teacher.

 

[NamelessKing]

So, is the Ask a Teacher ​section only for specific questions about grammar and vocab?

 

[emsr2d2]

So, is the Ask a Teacher [STRIKE]​[/STRIKE] section only for specific questions about grammar and vocabulary?

Ideally, yes.

 

[Tarheel]

Did you see the person or just the shadow? (Shadows don't talk.)

 

[NamelessKing]

Did you see the person or just the shadow? (Shadows don't talk.)

Just the shadow.

How about "...spotted a colossal human shadow and heard "Get off my land" from a gruff voice"?

 

[Tarheel]

Yes. I like that one better. (It sounds scary.)