I need an explanation and probably help with sentences

[bozhko]

I do know that something wrong in this sentences, but i don't know how to fix. Help me please!

"However, the world goes on, and technologies improving with each passing year more and more! And here you can not do without expanding range of products."

 

[bhaisahab]

Welcome to the forums, bozhko. Is this homework?

 

[bozhko]

no, it's not. i used it in my speech. And it was on the slide of my presentation. I got a remark about this slide.

 

[emsr2d2]

What was the remark?

 

[bozhko]

That the first sentence needs rewriting. And also in the second sentence one important element is missing.

 

[emsr2d2]

I do know that something wrong in this sentences, but i don't know how to fix. Help me please!

"However, the world goes on, and technologies [STRIKE]improving[/STRIKE] improve more and more with each passing year. [STRIKE]more and more! [/STRIKE]And here you can not do without expanding range of products."

I have corrected the first sentence. I don't know what you're trying to say with the second sentence. Can you try to write it differently to explain what you mean?

 

[bozhko]

I mean, it's necessary to upgrade and expand the range of products by adding new elements. It's about competition in the product market.

 

[emsr2d2]

What did you mean by "And here" at the start of that sentence?

 

[bozhko]

like "in this case"

 

[emsr2d2]

In what case? Do you mean that these things need to be done because technology improves every year?

 

[bozhko]

Exactly. Because of competition between manufacturers, and also because of technological progress.

 

[emsr2d2]

OK, I have shortened (simplified) your sentence. This is how I would write it based on what you have told us.

However, the world moves on and technologies improve more and more every year, so it's important to expand your range of products.

 

[bozhko]

Thanks a lot!

 

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