Is the sentence right too? Thank you for helping me!

[dodonaomik]

Hemingway's wives_____Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom, and Mary Welsh_____were all strong and interesting women.
(a sentence in GMAT, a right sentence)




Now, I want know the below sentence is right or not!
Hemingway's wives_____Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom, and Mary Welsh_____all were strong and interesting women.

 

[bhaisahab]

Hemingway's wives_____Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom, and Mary Welsh_____were all strong and interesting women.
(a sentence in GMAT, a right sentence)




Now, I want know the below sentence is right or not!
Hemingway's wives_____Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom, and Mary Welsh_____all were strong and interesting women.

The second would be OK with a comma after "Welsh".

 

[emsr2d2]

The second would be OK with a comma after "Welsh".

Bhai's resulting sentence would be "Hemingway's wives Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom, and Mary Welsh, all were strong women." I'm sorry to say that I don't like it much.

I agree with Bhai that the original could be made correct but, in my opinion, only if "were" were inserted between "wives" and "Hadley" and a dash used after "Welsh".

Hemingway's wives were Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom (no comma here) and Mary Welsh - all were strong and interesting women.

I'll be interested to hear what others think.

 

[dodonaomik]

bhaisahab：
Thanks a lot!
In my opinion, in the second, if "all" means "Hemingway's wives" or "Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom, and Mary Welsh" as an appositive of "Hemingway's wives", thus it seems inappropriate and redundant.
So, "all" means "totally" as an adverb.
These are my opinion, but I am not sure my opinion is right.
Do think my opinion is right?

 

[5jj]

In my opinion, these are possible:

Hemingway's wives, Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom no comma and Mary Welsh, were all strong and interesting women.

Hemingway's wives, Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom no comma and Mary Welsh, all were strong and interesting women.

Hemingway's wives were Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom no comma and Mary Welsh; all were strong and interesting women.

I don't much like the second, but I think it's acceptable.

 

[dodonaomik]

Hemingway's wives were Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom (no comma here) and Mary Welsh - all were strong and interesting women.

emsr2d2:
Thank you for helping me!
I think the sentence is good and right, but I still wanna say I (as a non-native speaker) like the below sentence:
Hemingway's wives were Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom (no comma here) and Mary Welsh , and they were all strong and interesting women.

 

[dodonaomik]

In my opinion, these are possible:

Hemingway's wives, Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom no comma and Mary Welsh, were all strong and interesting women.

Hemingway's wives, Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom no commaand Mary Welsh, all were strong and interesting women.

Hemingway's wives were Hadley Richardson, Pauline Pfeiffer, Martha Gelhom no comma and Mary Welsh; all were strong and interesting women.

I don't much like the second, but I think it's acceptable.

Thanks a lot!

If I remember correctly, my senior English teacer (a serious Chinese women) taught us that "an adverb must be put behind of a predicate", so I guess many Chinese students will think your second sentence is strange or wrong.

Will British native-speakers think your second sentence is right?

 

[MikeNewYork]

Thanks a lot!

If I remember correctly, my senior English teacer (a serious Chinese women) taught us that "an adverb must be put behind of a predicate", so I guess many Chinese students will think your second sentence is strange or wrong.

Will British native-speakers think your second sentence is right?

I like 5jj's first sentence the best, but I would use the comma (Oxford comma) after the third name in the series.

 

[dodonaomik]

I like 5jj's first sentence the best, but I would use the comma (Oxford comma) after the third name in the series.

Thank you!!! I feel 5jj's first sentence can be understood and accepted much more easily.
Perhaps in China, serious English students have learned may be prepared for examination... ... "test English"?:-D
But my English teachers are all very very very good!
ps:
My junior English teacher is an amiable and earnest woman;
senior English teacher is a slender and serious woman；
university English teacher is a plumpy and rigorous woman.

 

[emsr2d2]

Much as I think it should be added to the dictionary, "plumpy" isn't a word! She is "plump" (note that it's not always polite to refer to someone's size/weight).

 

[Rover_KE]

dodonaomik, please note that a better title would have been 'Hemingway's wives'.

Extract from the Posting Guidelines:

'Thread titles should include all or part of the word/phrase being discussed.'

Rover

 

[dodonaomik]

dodonaomik, please note that a better title would have been 'Hemingway's wives'.

Extract from the Posting Guidelines:

'Thread titles should include all or part of the word/phrase being discussed.'

Rover

Rover_KE:
Now, I have understood your meaning.
Yes, you are right and thank you for your kind advice, and I will notice it next time.