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I am preparing for my exam. Please make suggestions for my draft below. Thank you.:-D
Topic:
Currently, only a small number of students in your school have access to school lockers. As the chairperson of the Student Union of your school, you have collected the views of students from different classes on this issue. Write a letter to Ms Lee, your school Principal, to persuade her to change the policy on lockers.
Dear Ms Lee,
As the chairperson of the Student Union, I am writing with regards to revamp the policy about the usage of lockers in school. This is because a number of complaints have been filed towards limited access to lockers recently. It has been estimated there are more than 50 students urging for an increase in the number of lockers, whilst there are 22 students suggesting renovation works shall be carried out for the existing lockers. It is hoped that this letter can draw your particular attention to students’ concerns.
First and foremost, we cordially look for more locker provisions on each floor in school. It is understandable that the school wants students to bring their textbooks to home for revision and reference. But it is reflected that the schoolbags of students are already crammed with textbooks of various subjects, making students extremely tedious when carrying their schoolbags. To our concern, some students even leave their textbooks in their drawers unattended in a bid to ease burdens on schoolbags. Not only are there many calls on the installation of more lockers, but also textbooks-missing reports are on the rise. Therefore, the school shall find ways to address all these problems.
After the consolidation of students’ opinions, most consider that one locker shared by two students is a better alternative than the original policy – only senior students can have access to lockers. Only within this amendment, students from junior forms can also have access to lockers. After discussion with staff from management office, it is feasible to install lockers on each floor near the toilets, hopefully, students can save time heading to the ground floor and use their lockers. The details of the location for installation have already been marked down on the layout plan enclosed for your further decision.
Apart from setting up more lockers, we also see the need to refurbish the existing lockers on the ground floor. This is because there was an incident last week that the door of a locker detached and fell down, and accidentally hit a student. Members of the Student Union are very much concerned with the incident, as it is related to the safety of the students. We have discovered that quite a number of lockers on the ground floor are dilapidated and have spotted rust on the hinge of some lockers. This would give rise to more incidents of similar kind if no refurbishment works are carried out.
We hope that the school can amend the policy regarding the lockers and we would like to see a quick resolution to renovating the existing one. Thank you in advance for your favorable reply.
Yours sincerely,
Jessica Chan
Topic:
Currently, only a small number of students in your school have access to school lockers. As the chairperson of the Student Union of your school, you have collected the views of students from different classes on this issue. Write a letter to Ms Lee, your school Principal, to persuade her to change the policy on lockers.
Dear Ms Lee,
As the chairperson of the Student Union, I am writing with regards to revamp the policy about the usage of lockers in school. This is because a number of complaints have been filed towards limited access to lockers recently. It has been estimated there are more than 50 students urging for an increase in the number of lockers, whilst there are 22 students suggesting renovation works shall be carried out for the existing lockers. It is hoped that this letter can draw your particular attention to students’ concerns.
First and foremost, we cordially look for more locker provisions on each floor in school. It is understandable that the school wants students to bring their textbooks to home for revision and reference. But it is reflected that the schoolbags of students are already crammed with textbooks of various subjects, making students extremely tedious when carrying their schoolbags. To our concern, some students even leave their textbooks in their drawers unattended in a bid to ease burdens on schoolbags. Not only are there many calls on the installation of more lockers, but also textbooks-missing reports are on the rise. Therefore, the school shall find ways to address all these problems.
After the consolidation of students’ opinions, most consider that one locker shared by two students is a better alternative than the original policy – only senior students can have access to lockers. Only within this amendment, students from junior forms can also have access to lockers. After discussion with staff from management office, it is feasible to install lockers on each floor near the toilets, hopefully, students can save time heading to the ground floor and use their lockers. The details of the location for installation have already been marked down on the layout plan enclosed for your further decision.
Apart from setting up more lockers, we also see the need to refurbish the existing lockers on the ground floor. This is because there was an incident last week that the door of a locker detached and fell down, and accidentally hit a student. Members of the Student Union are very much concerned with the incident, as it is related to the safety of the students. We have discovered that quite a number of lockers on the ground floor are dilapidated and have spotted rust on the hinge of some lockers. This would give rise to more incidents of similar kind if no refurbishment works are carried out.
We hope that the school can amend the policy regarding the lockers and we would like to see a quick resolution to renovating the existing one. Thank you in advance for your favorable reply.
Yours sincerely,
Jessica Chan
