"The number of men employed increased 11.1 percent between 1984 and 1994; women's employment was down (dropped) 12.6 percent in the same period."
Men's employment rose (from 'rise'), it didn't raise.
Does it sound OK if the original is revised as follows:
- Men's employment rose in 1994, up 11.1 percent from 1984, women's employment was down 12.6 percent in the same period.(I am not sure "in the same period" fits the sentence)