Once, I visited a restaurant in Ballarat

[solutionst]

Hi, my elder has told me to write some lines about my favorite food I have ever tried, so I wrote this. Please check if it has any mistakes.
"Once, I visited a restaurant in Ballarat and ate Cheese burger Ballarat there. These were so good. I love them and wanna try them again and again."
Note that I am not good at English. Just a beginner and trying to learn more.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi. My elder* has told asked me to write some lines about my favorite food I have ever tried, so I wrote this. Please check if it has and correct any mistakes.

Once, I visited a restaurant in Ballarat and ate a Cheeseburger Ballarat. there. These were It was so good. I love them loved it and wanna want to try them it again. and again.

Note that I am not good at English. I'm just a beginner and [who is] trying to learn more.

Please see my changes above. Also note that I have removed the unauthorised hyperlink. Please don't hyperlinks in your posts unless they link to a language site that is somehow connected to your language question.

*What do you mean by "my elder"?

 

[emsr2d2]

I note that you put the hyperlink back into post #1. Please don't do that. It is up to us what links appear on our forum. We don't need to see the burger in order to check the language in your post. If you post the link again, the whole thread will be deleted.

 

[Rover_KE]

You’ve had it before, so I’d change ‘try’ to ‘have’.

Again, what do you mean by ‘my elder’?