Please check my personal statement for public health program

[goodboybkk]

Please check my personal statement for a master public health program. Thanks

From a very early age, I have always been passionately interested in medicine and public health. It was my mother, who is a community nurse, introducing me that first sparked this avid interest. I can always recall the feeling of wanting to know just how doctors and nurses functioned, why they were at work day and night and what else they could possibly do.

This deep interest never left me, only growing deeper and more passionate with every day. So, I worked very hard to pass the national medical school admission test and at the end I got accepted and learned medicine and also public health at undergraduate level. I have worked at several health community centres, in which some of them were in abject poverty, in Indonesia as a medical doctor, a health educator, and public health adviser.

Seeing the dire consequences of the pandemic on my close family, colleagues and friends, some of who have died, have a long covid, have a prolonged fatigue on end, has inspired me to apply for a Master of Arts in Public Health at your university. I really want to make sure that when the next time a pandemic does happen, we are practically ready to respond to dire repercussions, learning from the success and sorry stories that have appeared over the past 3 years.

I feel that your MA in Public Health program will provide me with the useful skills needed to contribute community from a public health perspective in the near future. I’m particularly interested in several modules you kindly offer in “concepts of health” and healing, “public health, sustainability, and community”, as well as the options to specialise in “global ethics and public health” and international politics of health to make a better world free of AIDS, infectious diseases and other

Clearly, there is a significant role that public health professionals can play in influencing the policies of local, nationwide and global organisations. I feel that the Master of Arts in Public Health at your university provides an excellent platform from which to start impacting policies in a keen sense, providing many golden opportunities to connect with well-thought policy makers.

 

[teechar]

1- What is the expected word count for that letter?
2- Which areas/points were you asked to cover?
3- Is there a URL (link) that outlines the requirements?
4- What is the submission deadline?
5- What exactly is it that you are applying for?

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

It was my mother, a community nurse, who sparked this avid interest.

Are you going to tell them you got help here?

They are probably going to expect your English to be at whatever level it is in the personal statement. (I could be wrong.)

 

[goodboybkk]

1. Around 400-500.
2. The cogent reason why I want to enrol for this MPH program.
3. NTU MA Public Health
4. 25 June
5. MA in Public Health

 

[teechar]

The first paragraph and half of the second one contain a lot of waffle. Try to cut that out, and instead, say what degrees you have earned so far and when you earned them. In fact, the more specifics (qualifications, achievements, publications, extracurricular certificates, etc) you include in your letter, the more substance it'll have, and that would make it more convincing to the person assessing your application.

Also, in your last paragraph, it would do no harm to indicate where you see yourself working after finishing this master's degree.
Amend your letter and repost it below.

 

[goodboybkk]

From a very early age, I have always been passionately interested in medicine and public health. It was my mother, who is a community nurse, introducing me that first sparked this avid interest. I can always recall the feeling of wanting to know just how doctors and nurses functioned, why they were at work day and night and what else they could possibly do.

This deep interest never left me, only growing deeper and more passionate with every day. So, I worked very hard to pass the national medical school admission test and at the end I got accepted and learned medicine and also public health at undergraduate level. I have worked at several health community centres, in which some of them were in abject poverty, in Indonesia as a medical doctor, a health educator, and public health adviser.

Seeing the dire consequences of the pandemic on my close family, colleagues and friends, some of who have died, have a long covid, have a prolonged fatigue on end, has inspired me to apply for a Master of Arts in Public Health at your university. I really want to make sure that when the next time a pandemic does happen, we are practically ready to respond to dire repercussions, learning from the success and sorry stories that have appeared over the past 3 years.

I feel that your MA Public Health program at NTU will provide me with the useful skills needed to contribute community from a public health perspective in the near future. I’m particularly interested in several modules you kindly offer in “concepts of health” and healing, “public health, sustainability, and community”, as well as the options to specialise in “global ethics and public health” and “international politics of health” to make a better world free of AIDS, infectious diseases and other infectious diseases.

I should mention that the other cogent reason I choose MA in Public Health at NTU is it offers the chance to undertake a period of practical experience within the Public Health field.

Another compelling reason why I choose NTU is that Nottingham is a medium size city in which I can find accommodation at a reasonable price and the city is not far from London, Manchester, or Edinburgh.

Clearly, public health professionals can play a significant role in influencing the policies of local, nationwide and global organisations. I feel that the Master of Arts in Public Health at your university provides an excellent platform from which to start impacting policies in a good sense, providing many golden opportunities to connect with well-thought policy makers.

After finishing the NTU Public Health master program, I plan to integrate the public health knowledge I obtain from this program to work with other healthcare professionals as doctor with a public health knowledge in my country. I want to improve public health access for all who seek holistic healing. Ultimately, the NTU Public Health master program would allow me to combine the science of public health with the art of compassion of medicine to promote Public Health.

 

[teechar]

From a very early age, I have always been passionately interested in medicine and public human health. It was My mother’s work, who is a community nurse, introducing me that first sparked this avid interest. I can always recall the feeling of wanting to know just how doctors and nurses function, why they were at work day and night and what else they could possibly do.

This deep interest never left me, only growing deeper and more passionate with every day. So,

I worked very hard to pass the national medical school admission test and at the end I got accepted. and learned I studied medicine and also public health at undergraduate level. I have worked at several health community centres, in which some of them which were in areas of abject poverty, in Indonesia, as a medical doctor, a health educator, and a public health adviser.

Seeing the dire consequences of the COVID-19 pandemic on my close family, colleagues and friends, some of who have died, while others have a long COVID covid, have a prolonged (manifesting in prolonged fatigue) on end, has inspired me to apply for the Master of Arts in Public Health at your university. I really want to make sure that when the next time a pandemic occurs, does happen, we are practically ready to respond to dire its repercussions. , learning from the success and sorry stories that have appeared over the past 3 years.

I feel that your MA Public Health program at NTU will provide me with the useful skills needed to contribute to my community from a public health perspective after I graduate. in the near future. I’m I am particularly interested in several modules you kindly on offer, including “concepts of health” and healing, “public health, sustainability, and community”, as well as the option to specialise in “global ethics and public health” and “international politics of health” to make a better world free of AIDS, infectious diseases and other ailments. infectious diseases.

I should mention that the other cogent reason I choose MA in Public Health at NTU is that it offers the chance to undertake a period of practical experience within the public health field. Another compelling reason why I choose NTU is that Furthermore, Nottingham is a medium-size city in which I can find accommodation at a reasonable price, and the city is not far from major metropolises such as London, Manchester, or Edinburgh.

Clearly, public health professionals can play a significant role in influencing the policies of local, nationwide national, and global organisations. I feel that the Master of Arts in Public Health at your university provides an excellent platform from which to start impacting learn how to formulate effective policies, in a good sense, providing many golden opportunities as well as to connect with well-thought experienced public health policy makers.

After finishing the NTU Public Health master’s program, I plan to integrate the public health knowledge I obtain from this program to in my work with other healthcare professionals as a doctor with a public health knowledge in my country. I want to improve public health access for all who seek holistic healing. Ultimately, the NTU Public Health master’s program would allow me to combine the science of public health with the art of compassion of medicine to promote public health in my country.

 

[Tarheel]

I would choose between "from an early age" and "I have always been".

 

[Tarheel]

You can learn from successes and failures, but your version doesn't work.

I assume you disagree with my suggestion in post #4.