Please Review my Motivation Letter

[Tarheel]

Say:

Unfortunately, with the development of modern medicine people have tended to abandon the herbal medicine culture. But herbal medicines tend to have fewer adverse side effects than prescription or over the counter medicines.

 

[Tarheel]

Say:

Herbal medicines can be used for a long time without adverse effects.

 

[Tarheel]

The medicinal herbs are the plants that herbal medicines are made from. Herbal medicines are made from medicinal herbs.

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

Medicinal herbs (Jamu) have been used in modern medicine to a very limited extent.

 

[Tarheel]

Perhaps:

In this case, Indonesia can learn from developed countries such as Germany, South Korea, and China.

 

[Tarheel]

I think the Indonesian people probably use herbal medicine more and understand it better than you think. That would be especially true outside of the urban centers. (In the villages.)

 

[Tarheel]

Herbal medicine

Three things.

Are you saying that Germans, Koreans and Chinese use herbal medicines in their daily lives? As preventatives?

Could you make shorter paragraphs?

It would better not to post any more of that in this thread. Instead, start a new one.

 

[Tarheel]

Re: Herbal medicine

Say:

Indonesians will gladly use harbal medicines in their daily lives if only somebody will show them how.

 

[Tarheel]

Re: Herbal medicine

Say:

The problem is there are not enough people to educate them in the use of herbal medicines.

 

[Tarheel]

Herbal medicine

You have the responsibility for solving your country's problems? (I think you should narrow your goals down a bit.)

 

[Tarheel]

Re: Herbal medicine

You are part of the younger generation that will improve everyone's lives by improving medicine so that it will meet everybody's needs better.

 

[Tarheel]

Re: Herbal medicine

I don't know what to say about the last part.