laluuuusii
Junior Member
- Joined
- Aug 29, 2021
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Spanish
- Home Country
- Spain
- Current Location
- Spain
I have written this proposal as practice for my CAE qualification. I would appreciate some feedback on how to improve it.
”The council where you live has received funding to provide new facilities in the town. You decide to write a proposal to the head of the council recommending two facilities that could be provided. Your proposal should include details of who would use them and how they would benefit the town as a whole. You should also say which of the two facilities you believe would be most popular with residents”.
PROVIDING NEW FACILITIES
As requested, this proposal aims to suggest two facilities that could be substantially beneficial to the town. I will elucidate to whom they would be most useful, and which of the two would certainly succeed among residents.
A PRISTINE LIBRARY
It is common knowledge reading is recommended to everyone. Unfortunately, not all residents have enough money to play with so they cannot afford as many books as they would like. Conversely, many claim is unethical to download books online. Consequently, a library would appeal them , given a wide spectrum of styles are usually included in any library. Investing money in this kind of facility would in all likelihood be worth it , as it infuses citizens not only with information but also with curiosity.
A GYM
As healthy routines are becoming well-known and famous, providing a gym would by all means be a win-win. It would encourage residents, especially young people, to exert themselves there and grow healthily. It could even be a way of socializing, too.
CONCLUSION
To finish with, I will compare both. Whereas there is no specific age wherein it is most popular to go to the library, the gym interests foremostly to the youth and those in their forties or fifties. For this, if just one of them were to be taken into account, I would choose the former.
As a final observation, these facilities benefit the whole town because they embrace those preferring sedentary lifestyles, people who are keen on exercising and those being into the two activities.
”The council where you live has received funding to provide new facilities in the town. You decide to write a proposal to the head of the council recommending two facilities that could be provided. Your proposal should include details of who would use them and how they would benefit the town as a whole. You should also say which of the two facilities you believe would be most popular with residents”.
PROVIDING NEW FACILITIES
As requested, this proposal aims to suggest two facilities that could be substantially beneficial to the town. I will elucidate to whom they would be most useful, and which of the two would certainly succeed among residents.
A PRISTINE LIBRARY
It is common knowledge reading is recommended to everyone. Unfortunately, not all residents have enough money to play with so they cannot afford as many books as they would like. Conversely, many claim is unethical to download books online. Consequently, a library would appeal them , given a wide spectrum of styles are usually included in any library. Investing money in this kind of facility would in all likelihood be worth it , as it infuses citizens not only with information but also with curiosity.
A GYM
As healthy routines are becoming well-known and famous, providing a gym would by all means be a win-win. It would encourage residents, especially young people, to exert themselves there and grow healthily. It could even be a way of socializing, too.
CONCLUSION
To finish with, I will compare both. Whereas there is no specific age wherein it is most popular to go to the library, the gym interests foremostly to the youth and those in their forties or fifties. For this, if just one of them were to be taken into account, I would choose the former.
As a final observation, these facilities benefit the whole town because they embrace those preferring sedentary lifestyles, people who are keen on exercising and those being into the two activities.