[General] reached an agreement/ reached a satisfactory solution

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Economist2010

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My prospective employer has recently downgraded my title from a senior manager to manager. I had a discussion with my prospective manager to negotiate with HR to keep the title unchanged or to offer me a similar senior role equivalent to senior manager.

I would like to follow up with him now. Is it common and professional to say the following? If no, please suggest a better alternative that works in this context.

"Hope you reached an agreement/ reached a satisfactory solution with HR and they don't mind offering me a similar senior role"
 

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I hope that you have reached [STRIKE]an agreement/ reached[/STRIKE] a satisfactory solution with HR and that they don't mind offering me a similar senior role.
Try that.
 

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I don't find "that they don't mind offering me" natural or professional. It's not a case of whether they mind doing so or not. It's a case of whether or not there is a similar senior role vacant at the moment.
 

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My prospective employer has recently downgraded my title from a senior manager to manager. I had a discussion with my prospective manager to negotiate with HR to keep the title unchanged or to offer me a similar senior role equivalent to senior manager.

I would like to follow up with him now. Is it common and professional to say the following? If not, please suggest an [STRIKE]better[/STRIKE] alternative [STRIKE]that works in this context[/STRIKE].

"I hope you and HR have found [STRIKE]reached an agreement/ reached[/STRIKE] a [STRIKE]satisfactory[/STRIKE] solution [STRIKE]with HR[/STRIKE] and can offer me a senior role."

"I hope you and HR have found a solution and can offer me a senior role."
Avoid wordiness. Punctuate the ends of all sentences.

Let us know what happens!
 
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