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Please evaluate my IELTS essay and point out any errors .
Some people believe that having a pet such as a cat or a dog helps old people to live a more enjoyable life and to stay healthier. How do you think old people benefit from having a pet? Do you think there are any problems related to old people who have pets?
In many countries, people after retirements like to do various things such as gardening, reading book and maintaining their pets. Having pets is the most favorite activity among senior citizen in my country. They would like to take care of their pets in their spare time. Feeding, cleaning and walking are the few activities that they performed on daily basis. By doing this, they feel more energetic and healthier.
Firstly, people used to have pets for various benefits. One of the main advantages is that pets like dogs provide great security in crime related areas. For this reason, they have been trained well to cope up with un-desirable situation. Furthermore, pets have been used in various games such as polo and racing.
Secondly, maintaining pets is not an easy task. It required full time dedication and hard work. It have been seen, senior citizen who have pets seems to be healthier and active than others. One of the reason is that they keep indulge themselves in taking care of their pets.
Thirdly, I do not think that having pets cause problems for old people. But it could help to reduce their problems such as stress and tension. According to recent study, old people who are reluctant to involve themselves in any activity are more opted towards diseases
Finally, I believe that pets really helped to improve old people health and life style. They enjoyed their lives while maintaining their pets by fulfilling their basic needs and demands. It’s a must activity in many part of the world.
Some people believe that having a pet such as a cat or a dog helps old people to live a more enjoyable life and to stay healthier. How do you think old people benefit from having a pet? Do you think there are any problems related to old people who have pets?
In many countries, people after retirements like to do various things such as gardening, reading book and maintaining their pets. Having pets is the most favorite activity among senior citizen in my country. They would like to take care of their pets in their spare time. Feeding, cleaning and walking are the few activities that they performed on daily basis. By doing this, they feel more energetic and healthier.
Firstly, people used to have pets for various benefits. One of the main advantages is that pets like dogs provide great security in crime related areas. For this reason, they have been trained well to cope up with un-desirable situation. Furthermore, pets have been used in various games such as polo and racing.
Secondly, maintaining pets is not an easy task. It required full time dedication and hard work. It have been seen, senior citizen who have pets seems to be healthier and active than others. One of the reason is that they keep indulge themselves in taking care of their pets.
Thirdly, I do not think that having pets cause problems for old people. But it could help to reduce their problems such as stress and tension. According to recent study, old people who are reluctant to involve themselves in any activity are more opted towards diseases
Finally, I believe that pets really helped to improve old people health and life style. They enjoyed their lives while maintaining their pets by fulfilling their basic needs and demands. It’s a must activity in many part of the world.
