We can advise you on the quality of your English but looking at your post I think that you first need to learn how to structure a CV.
Nobody is going to bother reading your life history without knowing what you want. First say what you applying for, then bullet point your qualifications and only then write some text explaining why you think you are qualified and why you want the course or job.
One thing, do put a blank line between each paragraph. A solid block of text with no breaks isn't easy to read and most CVs are rejected without being read in full.
Thread closed. OP has edited post #1 so that it contains only three words! There is nothing for us to do here. Muskys, if you want to post your SOP again, following the advice you were given here, you will have to start a new thread.