alpacinou
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I'm trying to describe a situation when a husband and a wife have one last drink before they separate. This is what I have written:
John and Nicole stared at each other in a sad silence. They knew their marriage was over but they could pretend to be a couple for one last night. They raised their glasses and clinked them in a silent toast. "Tomorrow, I will be a free woman," Nicole thought. "I will never love again," John thought.
I'm not happy with it. How can I make it better?
John and Nicole stared at each other in a sad silence. They knew their marriage was over but they could pretend to be a couple for one last night. They raised their glasses and clinked them in a silent toast. "Tomorrow, I will be a free woman," Nicole thought. "I will never love again," John thought.
I'm not happy with it. How can I make it better?