Topstudent
Member
- Joined
- Mar 5, 2020
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Danish
- Home Country
- Denmark
- Current Location
- Denmark
I'm trying to write a script:
In the basement, the masked man moves back to the foot of the stairs, looks up toward the door and listens. But hears nothing. He turns, looks around the room, and notices the CCTV camera in the opposite corner. He stares at it for a moment... then suddenly turns back and looks up the stairs again./then suddenly turns and looks back up the stairs./then suddenly turns and looks up the stairs again. He's heard something.
Which one of these (if any of them) sounds better in this context?
In the basement, the masked man moves back to the foot of the stairs, looks up toward the door and listens. But hears nothing. He turns, looks around the room, and notices the CCTV camera in the opposite corner. He stares at it for a moment... then suddenly turns back and looks up the stairs again./then suddenly turns and looks back up the stairs./then suddenly turns and looks up the stairs again. He's heard something.
Which one of these (if any of them) sounds better in this context?