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Please help to make it short
Kindly check my para below I want to make it shorter if possible & also tell me if it should be in past or future tense
The reins of the company are in the hands of Mr. Lokesh Bali, a veteran of Celebrity management, who has been in the field of Bollywood since 1993. He had produced Zaalim starring Akshay Kumar, Superhit Masoom (the movie specially known for the hit song "chota baccha jaanke"), associated with the production of X-Zone (Episode – I). Hence, he has goodwill in the Bollywood, the most vibrant (artistic) brush to paint success with precision. He had successfully executed events both in India and abroad, like "Nayaa Andaaz"a big event in Surat, a Punjabi comedy show (mention the name) telecasted on Doordarshan channel, many successful documentaries; one of them was "HATYA," movie based on environment and communal harmony.Currently,he is looking after AKshay Kumar’s business & managing his venture - Paint Arts.
Regards,
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Re: Please help to make it short
Why do you want to make it shorter. It sounds good as it is.
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Re: Please help to make it short

Originally Posted by
fighting spirit
Why do you want to make it shorter. It sounds good as it is.
I thought so too.
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Re: Please help to make it short

Originally Posted by
GuidanceHD
I thought so too.

what about the tense it is correct to use past tense or everythg need to be in present tense...
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Re: Please help to make it short

Originally Posted by
new2grammar
Kindly check my para below I want to make it shorter if possible & also tell me if it should be in past or future tense
The reins of the company are in the hands of Mr. Lokesh Bali, a veteran of Celebrity management, who has been in the field of Bollywood since 1993. He had has produced Zaalim starring Akshay Kumar, Superhit Masoom (the movie specially known for the hit song "chota baccha jaanke"), associated with the production of X-Zone (Episode – I). Hence, he has goodwill in the Bollywood, the most vibrant (artistic) brush to paint success with precision. He had has successfully executed events both in India and abroad, like "Nayaa Andaaz"a big event in Surat, and a Punjabi comedy show (mention the name) telecasted on Doordarshan channel. In addition, he has produced/made many successful documentaries; one of them was "HATYA," a movie based on environment and communal harmony.Currently,he is looking after (also attend to) AKshay Kumar’s business & managing his venture - Paint Arts.
Regards,
It sounds quite fine for me now. Well done.
Fragrant Regards,,,
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