business letter

[noman12]

sir i have written the below mentioned letter yesterday to our concern bank, can you analyze the grammar of this letter and any other sugestion.

26th April 2010



To,
The Manager
Habib Metropolitan Bank Ltd.
Head Office
Spencer's Building
I.I Chundrigar Road
Karachi, Pakistan

Ref: Research & Development Claim

Dear Sir,

We are providing copy of original registration certificate of RDA Cell Ministry of Textile Industry in order to release 60% remaining R&D Claims.

We request you to release remaining 60% R&D Claim.

Please do the needful at your earliest.

Thanking you
Yours truly,



For Shahi Textiles

[emsr2d2]

sir i have written the below mentioned letter yesterday to our concern bank, can you analyze the grammar of this letter and any other sugestion.

26th April 2010



To,
The Manager
Habib Metropolitan Bank Ltd.
Head Office
Spencer's Building
I.I Chundrigar Road
Karachi, Pakistan

Ref: Research & Development Claim

Dear Sir,

Attached is a copy of the original registration certificate of RDA Cell Ministry of Textile Industry, in order to request the release of the remaining 60% R&D Claims.

We request that you to release the remaining 60% R&D Claims.

Please do the needful take the necessary action at your earliest convenience.

Thanking you
Yours truly faithfully,



For Shahi Textiles

See amendments above.