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    Default management and marketing of

    "I am responsible for the management and marketing of SERICO, economics and business information website, to corporate executives and high ranking government officials."

    I intended to mean, by writing the above sentence,:

    1. responsible for the management of SERICO

    2. responsible for the marketing of SERICO to corporate executives and high ranking government officials.


    In that context, did I combine the two ideas right in the sentence above?
    I am especially wondering about the use of "to" because "to" only applies to the second idea.
    Does it in any way affect the first idea?

    Thanks

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    Default Re: management and marketing of

    Are you open to a complete rewrite, or do you just want to work on you original sentence?
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Re: management and marketing of

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Are you open to a complete rewrite, or do you just want to work on you original sentence?
    I want to work on my original sentence, making least amount of changes.

    I would appreciate any help I can get.

    Thank you.

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    Default Re: management and marketing of

    I was thinking what it would be like if I had changed "to" to "targeting".

    I would like to hear your expert opinion on that

    or if you have any better ideas, please enlighten me.

    Thank you.

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    Default Re: management and marketing of

    I prefer to.

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    Default Re: management and marketing of

    Quote Originally Posted by Tdol View Post
    I prefer to.

    Are you implying my original sentence is OK as it is without any grammatical ambiguity, for which I have looked for alternatives in the first place?

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    Default Re: management and marketing of

    [QUOTE=rainous;805531]How about this:

    "I am responsible for the management of SERICO's economics and business information website, and for marketing it to corporate executives and high-ranking government officials."

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