A serene surface of a lake is disturbed
What is the right verb for this context: "A serene surface of a lake is disturbed when a girl emerges"? It seems to me that "agitated" sounds better.
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Marina Gaidar
What is the right verb for this context: "A serene surface of a lake is disturbed when a girl emerges"? It seems to me that "agitated" sounds better.
No "agitated" does not sound better.
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I am not really sure what word I'd use. I haven't seen a lot of girls emerging from a lake through a serene surface.
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I think "disturbed" is OK. I think that I, as well as the serene surface, would be disturbed were I to witness such an eventuality. ;-)
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bhaisahab
I think "disturbed" is OK. I think that I, as well as the serene surface, would be disturbed were I to witness such an eventuality. ;-)
Does it sound awkward that the girl emerged from the water?
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Marina Gaidar
Does it sound awkward that the girl emerged from the water?
Not necessarily, no. It would depend on the rest of the text.
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Does it sound awkward that the girl emerged from the water?
Seriously, I cannot imagine a situation (other than in a fantasy film) in which anybody would emerge through a serene surface. The surface would not be serene unless the person had gone under it some considerable time before.
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5jj
Seriously, I cannot imagine a situation (other than in a fantasy film) in which anybody would emerge through a serene surface. The surface would not be serene unless the person had gone under it some considerable time before.
Ah, you mean that! I'm really writing a fantastic story;-)