A serene surface of a lake is disturbed

What is the right verb for this context: "A serene surface of a lake is disturbed when a girl emerges"? It seems to me that "agitated" sounds better.

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Originally Posted by Marina Gaidar

What is the right verb for this context: "A serene surface of a lake is disturbed when a girl emerges"? It seems to me that "agitated" sounds better.

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No "agitated" does not sound better.

I am not really sure what word I'd use. I haven't seen a lot of girls emerging from a lake through a serene surface.

I think "disturbed" is OK. I think that I, as well as the serene surface, would be disturbed were I to witness such an eventuality. ;-)

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Originally Posted by bhaisahab

I think "disturbed" is OK. I think that I, as well as the serene surface, would be disturbed were I to witness such an eventuality. ;-)

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Does it sound awkward that the girl emerged from the water?

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Originally Posted by Marina Gaidar

Does it sound awkward that the girl emerged from the water?

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Not necessarily, no. It would depend on the rest of the text.

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Originally Posted by Marina Gaidar

Does it sound awkward that the girl emerged from the water?

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Seriously, I cannot imagine a situation (other than in a fantasy film) in which anybody would emerge through a serene surface. The surface would not be serene unless the person had gone under it some considerable time before.

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Originally Posted by 5jj

Seriously, I cannot imagine a situation (other than in a fantasy film) in which anybody would emerge through a serene surface. The surface would not be serene unless the person had gone under it some considerable time before.

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Ah, you mean that! I'm really writing a fantastic story;-)