Could some1 kindly proof read my resume

[Rocky]

CONTACT DETAILS

NAME

Objective
To obtain an entry level position that will enable me to build up my knowledge of appropriate activities such as songs and stories.

To obtain an entry level position where I can maximize my skills in healthy meals and snacks preparation.

To obtain an entry level position that will enable me to use my I.T skills and gain more knowledge throughout being in the industry.


Education and training

2010 Currently completing certificate III childcare modules

· 2000 - 2005 ******** Secondary college-
Statement of Attainment in APPLY FIRST AID
Certificate of Applied Learning programs year 11&12
Certificate of Coffee Making Course

*******Secondary College-
STATE education and training-Certificate II
in Childcare studies

college name TAFE–
Certificate 1 in vocational preparation Certificate of FIRST AID LEVEL 1&2
Certificate of transition to Health, Nursing And Aged Care Programs


ACADEMIC ACHIEVEMENTS

2009
****STATE Challenge Competition- Second Prize
· 2007
Award of participation in 2007 ERIS Youth Camp
Certificate of participation in Arts & Technology Exhibition
· 2004- 2005
COLLEGE SPIRT AWARD
Certificate of Wonderfulness
Certificates of Achievements

WORK EXPERIENCE

2009 NAME OF Street kindergarten-assisting with the center's daily routines2008 STREET NAME Neighborhood house, occasional childcare-assistance with daily routines
2007 FLORIST NAME Flower & Gifts-florist assistance

[Rocky]

SKILLS AND TALENTS


Cooking and preparing healthy family meals
Baby setting
Occasions card making
Excellence people skills
Reliable and respectful
Well organized and motivated
Holds pride in honesty and integrity
Excellent work ethics
Friendly and smiley

I am good with the fowling computer programs: Microsoft Word, Microsoft Excel, Microsoft publisher and Microsoft PowerPoint.

Able to communicate in Arabic and English



Extraciriculim activities

Volunteer of Exodus community- kids in the shed after school program Volunteer of Glenlyn Aged care fecility-helping out with basic routines
Occasional Baby sitting
Yoga Sessions
Gardening
Cooking Classes
Setting and accomplishing personal & educational goals


REFERENCES


More is Available upon request





I hope there wasn't that many grammatical errors. I thank you in advance

[billmcd]

General Comments:

Your “Objectives” section should be specific to the particular employment/job you are seeking. That is, revise that section for each submission to a prospective employer. Don’t include an objective about preparing meals if you are seeking employment in the computer or information technology industry.

Objectives should include a statement about wanting to contribute to the continuing success of the company.

Be consistent in using capital letters for your headings and in titles of certificates and not using caps in detail where not necessary.

Check spelling yourself AND have someone else check spelling. Some examples of your spelling errors: “spirt”, “wonderfulness?”, “baby setting”, “fowling”, “Extraciriculum” and others…….

Other:

“to build my knowledge”
“information technology” (no abbreviation)
“Certificates of Achievement”
“Excellent people skills”
Delete “Friendly and smiley”
Under References: “Available Upon Request”

Resubmit here after you have made revisions.

[Rocky]

Hi there,I've PMed my resume to you so you could read it more clearer.I thought it would make it hard to correct my resume when I don't wish for some of my details and words to appear to the public.

Cheers,


oops! I can't send PMs until I ahve 15 pots or great? Oh well,I'll juts pots it here.

[Rocky]

PERSONAL DETAILS

objective

Seeking an entry level position that will enable me to build my knowledge and maximize my experience in the industry.

Education and training

2010 – currently completing certificate III childcare modules
Certificate of Food Safety Training-online course

· 2008 - 2009 Preston Girls Secondary college-
Statement of Attainment in apply first aid
Certificates of VCAL and VCE units- year 11&12
Certificate of Coffee Making Course

Banksia Secondary College-
Victorian education and training-certificate II
in Childcare studies

Kangan Batman TAFE–
Certificate 1 in vocational preparation Certificate of first aid level 1&2
Certificate of transition to health, nursing and aged care programs

ACADEMIC ACHIEVEMENTS

2009
VCAL challenge competition- second Prize
Housing Week Scholarship In Recognition of commitment to ongoing education
2007
Award of participation in 2007 ERIS Youth Camp
Certificate of participation in Arts & Technology Exhibition
2004- 2005
College spirit award
Certificate of wonderfulness
Certificates of achievement


WORK EXPERIENCE

· 2009 Gower Street kindergarten-assisting with the centre’s daily routines
· 2008 Preston Neighborhood house, occasional childcare-assistance with daily routines
· 2007 Dahlia Flower & Gifts-florist assistance

[Rocky]

SKILLS AND TALENTS

· Cooking and preparing healthy family meals
· Baby sitting
· Occasions card making
· Excellent people skills
· Reliable and respectful
· Well organized and motivated
· Holds pride in honesty and integrity
· Excellent work ethics
· I am good with the fowling computer programs:
Microsoft Word, Microsoft Excel, Microsoft publisher and Microsoft PowerPoint.

· Able to communicate in Arabic and English

EXTRA CURRICULUM ACTIVITIES

· Volunteer of Exodus community- kids in the shed after school program
· Volunteer of Glenlyn aged care felicity -helping out with basic routines
· Occasional Baby sitting
· Yoga Sessions
· Gardening
· Cooking Classes
· Setting and accomplishing personal & educational goals


REFERENCES


Ms. Teacher's name-Childcare VET course teacher
Banksia-La Trobe Secondary College. Phone no.

[More is available upon request]

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Is it OK if I write all of my personal details in capitals letters?


Thank-you very much

[billmcd]

Looks better. Be consistent by using all caps in your headings.
Spelling: "Extra Curricular" Activities
"Wonderfullness" Maybe this translates from you language but not used in English.
"in the shed after-school program" ("shed" ???)

[Rocky]

Looks better. Be consistent by using all caps in your headings.
Spelling: "Extra Curricular" Activities
"Wonderfullness" Maybe this translates from you language but not used in English.
"in the shed after-school program" ("shed" ???)

Very appreciating,thanks.