could anyone correct my paragraph

[elhithebest]

I´ve been asked to write a paragraph titled The Golden Age of Female Singers. please tell me if this is correct thanks in advanced.

The 21st century is The Golden Age of Female Singers. Since at least a decade ago women have broken the chains and become more independent in every aspect of life, in early times women had to ask for permission for almost everything, nowadays they do as they want, wear whatever they like, this is well shown in female singers. while before there were mostly men who where at the tops of every ranking in the world, we have now female megastars like Alexandra Burke, Lady Ga Ga, Beyoncee and many others who are at the top of their careers driving their fans crazy at their gigs with their incredible voices and excentrics outfits. It is fantastic the way in which women have reveled and said to the world that this is our time to shine.

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The 21st century is The Golden Age of Female Singers. Since at least a decade ago women have broken the chains and become more independent in every aspect of life, in early times women had to ask for permission for almost everything,

Too many ideas in each sentence. Break them into smaller pieces. Also notice the edits.

The 21st century is The Golden Age of Female Singers. For at least a decade, women have broken their chains and become more independent in every aspect of life. In early times, women had to ask permission for almost everything.

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nowadays they do as they want, wear whatever they like, this is well shown in female singers.

Nowadays they do as they want, wear whatever they like. This shows in female singers.

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while before there were mostly men who where at the tops of every ranking in the world, we have now female megastars like Alexandra Burke, Lady Ga Ga, Beyoncee and many others

Men used to sit on top of every field in the world, singing included. Now we have female megastars such as Alexandra Burke, Lady Ga Ga and Beyoncee.

[elhithebest]

Men used to sit on top of every field in the world, singing included. Now we have female megastars such as Alexandra Burke, Lady Ga Ga and Beyoncee.

thanks for having answer, I´ll take into account your corrections. It is truly dif. for me to acquire the correct way of writing in English. your very helpful

[playful]

You're welcome.

and many others who are at the top of their careers driving their fans crazy at their gigs with their incredible voices and excentrics outfits. It is fantastic the way in which women have reveled and said to the world that this is our time to shine.

With their incredible voices and excentrics outfits, these singers drive their fans crazy. These women have shown the world that it is the the time for female singers to shine.

Elhi, one technique that may help you at your stage is to try and write without using the verb "to be". This technique is called E-prime (you can read about it on Wikipedia).

[Gillnetter]

I´ve been asked to write a paragraph titled The Golden Age of Female Singers. please tell me if this is correct thanks in advanced.

The 21st century is The Golden Age of Female Singers. Since at least a decade ago women have broken the chains and become more independent in every aspect of life. In early earlier times women had to ask for permission for almost everything, nowadays they do as they want and wear whatever they like. This is well shown in female singers. While before there were mostly men who where were at the tops of every ranking in the world, we have now female megastars like Alexandra Burke, Lady Ga Ga, Beyoncee and many others who are at the top of their careers, driving their fans crazy at their gigs with their incredible voices and excentrics eccentric outfits. It is fantastic The way in which women have reveled and said to the world that this is our time to shine is fantastic.

Interesting subject but I feel that you should do some more research. Some of the most popular singers (in the US) of the 19th Century were women. In the 20th Century women singers were as well known, or better known, than male singers. Consider: Billie Holliday, Jo Stafford, The Andrew Sisters, Sarah Vaughn, Maybelle Carter and her daughters, and many more. Many of these singers did not conform to the standard rules of society but led the life they wanted.

[elhithebest]

ok but this is related to The Story of an Hour by Kate Chopin that we read. I don´t know if you have read the story, it´s about women in the 19th century, who were supposed under men´s power. then we saw some new female singers so my teacher gave us that topic sentence and the peragraph had to be a mixture of both readings. That´s why I wrote like that, of course I know there have always been great women, we always shine, before, now and ever!!!!!!!
It´s a joke, thanks anyway for givie me your point, everything helps.

please tell me if I have written every thing correct. That will help me too.
Thanks

[elhithebest]

I will, thanks

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