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[mariraj]

this is correct or not.
if error please correct it

Aspiring for a job that will enable me to use my technical skills that I could play the best part in the growth of the concern there by enriching myself.

[Allen165]

this is correct or not.
if error please correct it

Aspiring for a job that will enable me to use my technical skills that I could play the best part in the growth of the concern there by enriching myself.

NOT A TEACHER.

Your sentence doesn't make much sense to me, especially the second half of the sentence. What do you mean by "concern"? Are you referring to a business enterprise?

[Kazaman]

{I am not a teacher.)

Aspiring for a job that will enable me to use my technical skills that I could play the best part in the growth of the concern there by enriching myself.

"I want a job that will enable me to use my technical skills and where I could play an important role in the growth of the [I don't know what you mean by concern], thereby enriching myself."

Aspiring is in the gerundive (nominal verb, a verb which is like a noun), which isn't correct because it takes away the all important subject from this very fine sentence. You could have written "I'm aspiring to have a job," but "I want a job" is much more concise.

The next little bit of the sentence was perfect, until after "skills." I had to do a bit of guesswork to fix the last half, but I think I did a fairly good job. There is the matter of "concern." I couldn't figure out what you meant by that. Could you explain it in other terms?

[freezeframe]

{I am not a teacher.)



"I want a job that will enable me to use my technical skills and where I could play an important role in the growth of the [I don't know what you mean by concern], thereby enriching myself."

Aspiring is in the gerundive (nominal verb, a verb which is like a noun), which isn't correct because it takes away the all important subject from this very fine sentence. You could have written "I'm aspiring to have a job," but "I want a job" is much more concise.

The next little bit of the sentence was perfect, until after "skills." I had to do a bit of guesswork to fix the last half, but I think I did a fairly good job. There is the matter of "concern." I couldn't figure out what you meant by that. Could you explain it in other terms?

A general comment on this:

If your sentence is for a resume objective (it sounds like that to me, I could be wrong), you should not begin with "I want a job... "

You should start with something like "Obtain a position that will enable me to ... "

[Kazaman]

A general comment on this:

If your sentence is for a resume objective (it sounds like that to me, I could be wrong), you should not begin with "I want a job... "

You should start with something like "Obtain a position that will enable me to ... "

True. I had sort of assumed that he was using it in a casual setting.

[SoothingDave]

If this is an objective for a resume/CV, looking to land a job, then I would not say that I was looking to "enrich myself." Sounds like you are in it for you, and not for the company.

You could say that you are interested in continuously improving yourself. But not "enrich."

[riquecohen]

{I am not a teacher.)



"I want a job that will enable me to use my technical skills and where I could play an important role in the growth of the [I don't know what you mean by concern], thereby enriching myself."

"Concern" is sometimes used instead of company, firm, business,etc.
Definitions of concern - OneLook Dictionary Search

[mariraj]

i am mca fresher i need resume objective so please anyone suggest for that.i should put in resume today.

[freezeframe]

i am mca fresher i need resume objective so please anyone suggest for that.i should put in resume today.

1. I have no idea what your objective is. 2. I don't know where you're applying for the job 3. you're the one applying for the job, not me.

I'm sure someone would be happy to correct your English if you write your own objective.

[luschen]

"Concern" is sometimes used instead of company, firm, business,etc.
Definitions of concern - OneLook Dictionary Search

That is true, although the only time I ever remember seeing it used is in the term "going concern" which is more of an economic/accounting term.



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