Motivation letter for undergraduate study

[mishec]

Hey, could you be so kind and check my motivation letter? This is what I got so far, I would have to send it to the University during this week.
Help is really appreciated, as well as constructive criticism. Nothing in this letter is a "must-be", so feel free to change anything!
CHEERS!

Dear Sir or Madam,
I recently found out about the possibility of studying in Denmark. Slovakia - the country where I was born and raised - became a member of EMU 2 years ago. Whereas we are post-Communist country still trying to evolve into modern country with stable economy with high standard of living. Thus the country needs new ideas and young professionals.
I have been studying english since I was seven years old and I have always enjoyed meeting new people and getting to know different cultures. I have had a desire to study business and marketing since I was 10 years old! I have an ambition to be successful and work for a big concern, as well I would enjoy starting up my own business. I realize that an appropriate educations is needed for both of my dreams and I believe that Your University would give me much academic preparation and practical experience. I am highly motivated, because in marketing and sales, there are almost no boundaries, „the sky is the limit". I will work hard to achieve my goals and aspirations. Obtaining a degree from a UCN would be an honour and if given a chance, I will do my best to succeed.
I do not expect this to be easy, on the contrary, I think it will be really challenging. Nevertheless I am prepared and excited about things waiting for me in the future. I am open-minded, creative, social, with a sense of business and I think the Marketing Management AP Degree programme will perfectly suit my personality. That is why I will do my best to handle all the pressure and demands which are part of completing the academic program.

/What do you thing. Any opinion is highly appreciated!
Thanks!
mishec

[freezeframe]

Have you researched how to write academic motivation letters? There are many resources on line. Also, does your school and/or library have resources on this?

The tone of your letter and many things you say in it are very inappropriate.

[mishec]

Yes, I actually did a little bit, I even started with my friends ML. Im gonna check it once again and work on it.
But if you could do list of necessary changes, that would be awesome!
MP

[Gillnetter]

Hey, could you be so kind and check my motivation letter? This is what I got so far, I would have to send it to the University during this week.
Help is really appreciated, as well as constructive criticism. Nothing in this letter is a "must-be", so feel free to change anything!
CHEERS!

Dear Sir or Madam,
I recently found out about the possibility of studying in Denmark. Slovakia - the country where I was born and raised - became a member of EMU 2 years ago (The reader probably knows this and, in any case, it is not important.). Whereas we are post-Communist country still trying to evolve into modern country with stable economy with high standard of living (See the previous note.). Thus the country needs new ideas and young professionals.
I have been studying english since I was seven years old and I have always enjoyed meeting new people and getting to know different cultures (You have different ideas working through this sentence.)
I have been studying English since I was seven years old. I enjoy meeting new people and getting to know different cultures.)
. I have had a desire to study business and marketing since I was 10 years old! (There is no need for an exclamation point here.) I have an ambition to be successful and work for a big concern (large company), as well I would enjoy starting up my own business as well (These are conflicting ideas. People who want to work for large companies generally want stability. People who want to own their own business tend to take more risks and do not need stability.). I realize that an appropriate educations (education...this is what you get all of your life. "Educations" is not a correct word here.) is needed for both of my dreams and I believe that your University would give me much academic preparation and practical experience. I am highly motivated, because in marketing and sales, there are almost no boundaries, "the sky is the limit" (This sentence needs more work. "I am highly motivated, because in marketing and sales, there are almost no boundaries", is similar to writing, "I am highly motivated because airplanes fly high." More information is needed here - "I am highly motivated to study marketing and sales, because in marketing and sale, there are almost no boundaries."). I will work hard to achieve my goals and aspirations. Obtaining a degree from a UCN (What is a "UCN"? Spell out the word the first time you use it and put UCN next to the word (UCN).)would be an honour and, if given a chance, I will do my best to succeed.
I do not expect this to be easy, on the contrary, I think it will be really challenging. Nevertheless I am prepared and excited about the things waiting for me in the future. I am open-minded, creative, social, with a sense of business and I think the Marketing Management AP Degree programme will perfectly suit my personality. That is why I will do my best to handle all the pressure and demands which are part of completing the academic program.

/What do you thing. Any opinion is highly appreciated!
Thanks!
mishec

Your English is good but some of your reasoning is faulty. I suggest that you review this text and rewrite it. You should also take some time and read other motivation letters to get a better sense of the format used in these letters.