hey, I am german and I have to write a application for school, could you help me ? ^^

[shakur]

so this is the text i wrote :

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Dear Ms Harris,

I am writing this letter of the reason that i am planning to do a language course in oxford.I want to improve my Englisgh skills.

I am 20 years old and I live in Germany, to be exact in Stadtlohn a small village next to the dutch border. I have studied English for 10 years and now I would like to visit the language course in Oxford, because a friend of mine told me that Oxford has one of the best English courses in the World and this is the reason why I want to apply. I am planning to stay for 3 weeks and I would like to have a room with one bed. I T WOULD BE GREAT IF i Could get breakfast,lunch and evening meal.

My english level is intermediate so I understand English and speak english well. My interest are football, chess, theatre and going to the cinema with friend , but I also like studying history and English. Now I want to say something about my person, I would say that Iam a person who has his head in the clouds. I am an honest , energetic, friendly, helpful , polite person.

Beforer I finish this letter, i have got some questions. COuld you possibly tell me how much it will cost per week to rent the room and how much will the food cost?

I look forward to the reply.

Your sincerely,
abdul batiev




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what could i wrrite better, i thank you for the response

[billmcd]

so this is the text i wrote :

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Dear Ms. Harris,

I am writing this letter of the reason that i am planning to do for the purpose of enrolling in a language course in at Oxford. I want to improve my Englisgh skills.

I am 20 years old and I live in Stadtlohn, Germany, to be exact in Stadtlohn is a small village next to the Dutch border. I have studied English for 10 years and now I would like to visit the language course study English inat Oxford. because A friend of mine toldhas advised me that Oxford has one of the best English courses in the World and this is the reason why I want to apply. I am planning to stay for 3 weeks and I would like to have a room with one bed. And I would like the availability of breakfast,lunch and an evening meal.

My english level is "intermediate" so I understand English and speak english well. My interests are football, chess, theatre and going to the cinema with friends , but I also like studying history and English. Now I want to say something about my person, I would say that I am a person who has his head in the clouds (WHY would you ever make a statement like this in an application for ANYTHING?). I am an honest , energetic, friendly, helpful and polite. person.
[STRIKE]Beforer I finish this letter[/STRIKE], i have got some questions.In closing, could you possibly tell me how much it will cost per week to rent the room and how much will the food costs?

I look forward to the reply.

Your sincerely,
abdul batiev




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what could i wrrite better, i thank you for the response

And finally, what can you possibly learn in "3 weeks"?

[februar]

[QUOTE=shakur;832040]So this is the text I wrote:

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Dear Ms Harris,

I am writing this letter of the reason that as I am planning to do a language course in Oxford. I want to improve my English skills.

I am 20 years old and I live in Germany, to be exact in Stadtlohn, a small village near the Dutch border. I have studied English for 10 years and now I would like to visit the language course in Oxford, because a friend of mine told me that Oxford has one of the best English schools in the world and this is the reason why I want to apply. I am planning to stay for 3 weeks and I would like to have a single room with one bed. IT WOULD BE GREAT IF I could get breakfast, lunch and evening meal.

My English level is intermediate so I understand English and speak English well. My interests are football, chess, theatre and going to the cinema with friends, but I also like studying history and English. Now I want to say something about my character, I would say that I am a person who has his head in the clouds. I am an honest, energetic, friendly, helpful, and polite person.

Before I finish this letter, I have got some questions. Could you possibly tell me how much it will cost per week to rent a single room and how much will the food cost?

I look forward to the reply.

Yours sincerely,
abdul batiev

What could I write better, I thank you for the response.

februar, no teacher