Could you help me with my CV, please ?

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Hi !

I'm french and I just arrived in Liverpool 4 days ago. I am looking for a job but my english is not very good...
Could you help me to correct my CV please ?

Thanks you so much !!

Chloé DU*****
21 years old

Liverpool

Tel mobile: 07979 ******
E-mail: *****@live.fr

Profile

I consider myself to be an honest, trustworthy and reliable young person, smart in my appearance and quick to learn. I have a confident manner and am able to follow instructions. I enjoy working in a team and get along well with other people. I enjoy challenges and I like to keep busy and always work with the smile.

Key Skills

Hardworking and flexible: always willing to get stuck in and help others while available to work overtime and cover shifts when required

Keen to learn new skills: can adapt well to new roles and pick up new skills quickly and accurately while working under pressure

Content to work in variable conditions: work well as part of team as well as on my own initiative

Good communications skills: able to communicate in French (first language), English and German and get on well with other while displaying a positive and professional attitude

Computer: Competent ability to use MS office packages, Internet, E-mail and various “In-house” systems and programmes

Work experience

****** BAR; Lille, FRANCE Sep 2010 - Dec 2011
Bar Staff
Duties Included:
- Operating the till and taking cash
- Responsible for keeping the bar clean and tidy, collecting empty plates & glasses
- Preparing the bar for service, restocking wines, spirits, beers...
- Mixing cocktail for customers. (Menu of thirty different cocktails)
- Service of hot drink (tea, coffee, cappuccino, macchiato….)

******* BAR; Lille, FRANCE Sep 2009 - Dec 2011
Bar Staff
Duties Included:
- Operating the till and taking cash
- Preparing the bar for service, restocking wines, spirits, beers...
- Responsible for keeping the bar clean and tidy, collecting empty plates & glasses
- Organization of theme party (St Patrick, Halloween…)
- Formation of fifteen persons

Association PLANET TOUR; Lome, TOGO Summer 2011
Voluntary Work
Duties Included:
- Teaching of Mathematic (Primary class)
- Teaching of French
- Children’s activities
- Reforestation

Education

Equivalent Bachelor’s Degree in Biology 2009-2011
(Speciality Animal Biology); Lille 1 University, FRANCE

“A” level in Science with mention “Good” 2008
College Raymond Queneau; Villeneuve d’Ascq, FRANCE

Hobbies and personal interests

I enjoy travelling, photography and meet new people.
In my spare time I like listen to music and spend my time with my friends.

Referees

Reference available on request from:

Most recent Employer

Julien ********
Director
******* BAR
Lille

Tel: 00336 ********
Facebook: Log in | Facebook
(****** Bar-Ambiance)

[5jj]

The English is good. I'd change the order, so that the things that an employer are primarily interested in come first:

Education
Work experience
Key Skills
Profile
References

I have noted a few things I'd change. Please note that these are my personal thoughts - i do not claim to be an expert at proofreading or CVs.

Profile
... I like to keep busy and always work with the a smile.

Key Skills

Hardworking and flexible: always willing to get stuck in and help others, while available to work overtime and cover shifts when required

Content to work in variable conditions: work well as part of a team as well as on my own initiative

Good communications skills: able to communicate in French (first language), English and German and get on well with others, while displaying a positive and professional attitude


Work experience

****** BAR; Lille,...
- Responsible for keeping the bar clean and tidy, collecting empty plates & and glasses...
- Mixing cocktails for customers. (Menu of thirty different cocktails)
- Service of Serving hot drinks (tea, coffee, cappuccino, macchiato….)

******* BAR; Lille, FRANCE Sep 2009 - Dec 2011...
Ba collecting empty plates & and glasses
- Organization of theme partyies (St Patrick's, Halloween…)
- Formation of fifteen persons I don't understand this

Association PLANET TOUR; ...
- Teaching of Mathematics (Primary class)

- Reforestation I am not sure about this. What did you actually do?

Education

Licence (?) (= Bachelor’s Degree) in Biology 2009-2011
(Speciality Animal Biology); Lille 1 University, FRANCE


Hobbies and personal interests

I enjoy travelling, photography and meeting new people.
In my spare time I like listen to music and spend my time with my friends.