Motivation Letter Improvement[Urgent]

Hello everybody,
I want to apply for a Master Degree in Europe and I want to write a motivation letter. The deadline is about 14 years latter. Could you please help me to improve it as I dont know if it has grammatical/ vocab error?
Thank you very much in advance.

This is my letter:



Dear Sir/Madam

I am very enthusiastic about pursuing a master degree at the [Uni Name] in [Program Name: Computer Science]. I have completed my education in the Bachelor of Computer Engineering majoring in Software at [My Uni Name].

I believe the [Program Name] Master’s Degree offers me the greatest opportunity to expand my education in some very meaningful areas of interest as the program’s curriculum is outstanding which consists of subjects like Concurrency, Testing, and Evaluation which are essential in the software industry and they are my favorite in that field. I have used ‘object oriented Programming’ techniques and I have some knowledge about ‘software architectures’ so it is clear for me that how important are these subjects in software and I am positive that these courses in addition to my previous experience would make me more knowledgeable as a Software Developer. In addition, I am very enthusiastic about learning ‘artificial intelligence programming’ and solving problems by intelligent techniques as I have passed a basic course associated with ‘artificial intelligence’ during my Bachelor Degree which was very interesting.

My graduation thesis titled ‘web application development based on SOA’ which helped me to acquire worthwhile skills associated with practical and theoretical subjects as it needed a lot of research and further self-studies. By completing my thesis I learned how to integrate software programs using Web-Services and how to utilize ‘object oriented programming’ techniques in software development in addition to handling concurrency, data integrity, logging and security.

Through discussion with graduate students and my research, it is very evident that University of Tampere is one of the top universities in Finland. I would be proud to be a student in the Software Development program in your highly esteemed university.

I have completed a comprehensive Undergraduate program in Computer Software. As you can see by my resume, this program in addition to my practical experiences have prepared me well for the graduate education challenges I now wish to pursue. I hope that the skills and knowledge I obtain from this graduate degree will give me the opportunity to become a more professional software developer and to pursue my academic education.