Please correct my letter

[Elena1989]

Hi, everyone. My teacher has written a recommendation letter for me and I transleted it in English. As I am not a native English-speaker, can you correct my mistakes?
Thank you for reading.

To Whom It May Concern,

As the Dean of the Department of -/-, I have had the pleasure of knowing Elena for the last four years. She has been a tremendous student and an asset to our department. I would like to take this opportunity to recommend Elena for your graduate program.
Elena has studied at University -/- since 2008. During her studying she has proven to be a conscientious, responsible and motivated student. The academics at the department are most challenging, and Elena fulfilled all the requirements, she has always secured good and excellent grades throughout her undergraduate degree.
I also gave lectures on the subject international economics. During the study of the academic discipline she showed herself as an independent, active and industrious student. On the workshops she always prepared additional material. Elena was exempted from taking the exam because of excellent academic performance, so she got an excellent grade on the subject. Her intellect is evident not only from her grades but also from her general inquisitiveness about all the concepts of science as well as her choice of course projects.
I know Elena has been working throughout the education to pay the tuition fees. At the moment she works in an financial company and her diploma thesis is related to the finance and titled -\-, it differs in the novelty and reflects the distinguished training of the author.
Elena takes part in the life of the department and the university enthusiastically. She is an active participant of different dance performances, competitions in aerobics, scientific conferences. She is a member of the University Union. In class, she has proven to be a take-charge person who is able to successfully develop plans and implement them. She is also deeply involved in the social and political life of the country. Being a member of the Belarusian State Youth Union she wants to contribute to the development of the country and creating a positive image of it on the international arena.
It is for these reasons that I offer high recommendations for Elena without reservation. Her drive and abilities will truly be an asset to your establishment. If you have any questions regarding this recommendation, please do not hesitate to contact me.

[Gillnetter]

Hi, everyone. My teacher has written a recommendation letter for me and I transleted translated it into English. As I am not a native English-speaker, can would you correct my mistakes?
Thank you for reading.

To Whom It May Concern,

As the Dean of the Department of -/-, I have had the pleasure of knowing Elena for the last four years. She has been a tremendous student and an asset to our department. I would like to take this opportunity to recommend Elena for your graduate program.
Elena has studied at University -/- since 2008. During her studying studies she has proven to be a conscientious, responsible and motivated student. The academics at the department are most challenging, and Elena fulfilled all the requirements, she has always secured good and received excellent grades throughout her undergraduate degree (Either "throughout her undergraduate years", or, "while working on her undergraduate degree".).
I also gave lectures on the subject international economics (There doesn't seem to be a reason for this sentence to be included). During the study of the academic discipline she showed herself as to be an independent, active and industrious student. On the workshops she always prepared additional material. Elena was exempted from taking the exam because of excellent academic performance, so she got an excellent grade on the subject (This is somewhat confusing. Why did she get excellent grades if she didn't take the exam? I would opt to delete the part after "performance".). Her intellect is evident not only from her grades but also from her general inquisitiveness about all the concepts of science as well as her choice of course projects.
I know Elena has been working throughout the her education to pay the tuition fees. At the moment she works in an financial company and her diploma thesis is related to the finance and titled -\-, it differs in the novelty (of her approach to the subject??) and reflects the distinguished training of the author.
Elena takes part in the life of the department and the university enthusiastically. She is an active participant of in different dance performances, competitions in aerobics and scientific conferences. She is a member of the University Union. In class, she has proven to be was a take-charge person who iswas able to successfully develop plans and implement them (Past tense, use "was".). She is also deeply involved in the social and political life of the country. Being a member of the Belarusian State Youth Union she wants to contribute to the development of the country and creating a positive image of it on in the international arena.
It is for these reasons that I offer high recommendations for Elena without reservation. Her drive and abilities will truly be an asset to your establishment. If you have any questions regarding this recommendation, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Gil

[Elena1989]

Gil

Thank you very much!

I have one more recommendation letter. Please, if anyone have time correct it either.


To Whom It May Concern,

I would like to take an opportunity to offer a formal recommendation for Elena. As the Chair of the Subdepartment of -\- I have known Elena for approximately three years and feel that she is a deserving candidate for your graduate program.
I was a project guide for her during two years in our institution. Elena will complete her specialist's degree from our school with excellent grades and now wants to further her educational qualifications by acquiring a graduate degree. She is an energetic, capable and purposeful girl, who would certainly go on and excel at whatever she does in her life.
The student of the Department of -\-, Elena has expressed interest in research and scientific work at the second year of education. I have witnessed her advance and development of skills for those two years of research. She took the initiative in writing a research project titled -\-, which she reported at the scientific conference among students.
Diligence, independence, resourcefulness and flexibility have always been her strong streaks. She is not afraid of difficulties when faced with the problem. She is well-organized, communicative, honest and open for cooperation. Elena takes the criticism with ease and diligently works on inaccuracies. During the research she has shown the advanced skills in the working with software, excellent knowledge of the international economics and mathematics, which was used in economic calculations. She is also widely used foreign languages in the analysis of literature for writing a research project, it was her competitive advantage in participating in the conference.
I know of Elena's continued interest in programs related to international economics and finance. I feel confident that she will continue to succeed in her studies. I believe the Master’s Program will give her an opportunity to deepen the knowledge of international economics and finance as well as the possibility of using the experience gained in the research work.
Elena continues to impress me with her knowledge, skills and dedication to her studies. I’m sure you will find her to be a student whose talents will only shine further through your graduate program. It is my hope that you will accept her admission to your university. Feel free to contact me if you require further information.

Sincerely,
The Chair of the Subdepartment of -\-