sincerely ask for Application Letter review

[rockviller]

Hi, everyone,


I am seeking a legal assistant position found on the internet. But, I am not sure whether my application letter showed below is good enough to attract the recruiter's attention. So, I hope you can give me some advice. Any advice would be highly appreciated.




Dear Sir or Madam:

I would like to apply for the Legal Assistant position advertised in craigslist.com. Attached pleased find my resume.

My extensive legal practice experience and strong academic background has confirmed my interest in law and legal service. I have served as a Law Clerk to a Chief Judge of Linyi City Intermediate Court, a federal court in China, where I gained valuable organizational, administrative, and writing experience. My work was so highly admired that, after clerking for only fifteen months, I was appointed to be a Judge to hear complex retrial cases. My trial practice included civil cases, commercial cases, and criminal cases, which provided me plenteous opportunities to sharpen my legal and communication skills. I also have been employed as a part-time lawyer at Zhengtong Law Firm (Beijing, China) for around two years while I was pursuing my Master’s degree. I am proud that I handled eighteen cases and never lost one.

Aside from holding a Master’s degree in law and a Bachelor’s degree in law, I received my paralegal certificate from Capital University Law School Paralegal Program (Columbus, Ohio), one of the best paralegal training programs in the country. Through my course work, I gained the requisite knowledge and experience as a legal assistant, including contract law, corporate law, and legal research and writing.

I am very much motivated and a hard worker. It took me only two and half years to fulfill the three years’ of courses for a Master’s degree in law and graduate with Outstanding Graduate Honor from Peking University (also called Beijing University, Beijing, China) Law School, the most prestigious law school in China. During this period, I have successfully worked as a part-time lawyer mentioned before for almost two years.

I am positive that my knowledge and experience will strongly contribute to your client. I look forward to hearing from you soon.



Yours Sincerely,




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[Tdol]

pleased find my resume- please
plenteous opportunities- I'd change this to something like 'numerous'
I have successfully worked- past tense
Yours Sincerely- no need to capitalise 'sincerely'

Good luck

[rockviller]

Thank you so much, Tdol

Rockviller