
Originally Posted by
esophea
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my interest in your recently advertised position of Part Time Teacher of English broadcasted through FM 103.25 MHz. I believe that my English knowledge would be an asset to your Institution. Please find an enclosed resume, which further details my work experience and qualifications.
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Originally Posted by
esophea
I graduated from the National University of Management (NUM) with a Bachelor’s degree in Marketing in 2004. After I finished the University, I have found myself that my knowledge of Business English, Writing Skill, Business Letter and Research Methodology have brought me with an outstanding uses of English. Fortunately, I have been offered a job as a Credit Officer for the Canadia Bank Plc where I am compelled and necessary to use English.
Try:I graduated from the National University of Management (NUM) with a Bachelor’s degree in Marketing in 2004. After I finished the University, I have found discovered that my knowledge of Business English, Writing Skills, Business Letter and Research Methodology have given me an outstanding command of business English. Fortunately, I have been offered a job as a Credit Officer for the Canadia Bank Plc where I am required to use English.

Originally Posted by
esophea
Anyway, I am an enthusiastic and friendly person and I enjoy working with people both young and old particularly teaching English.
I look forward to meeting you to discuss your needs and my ability to meet them in more detail. In the meantime, please do not hesitate to contact me with any questions you may have. I can be reached at 012 725 775
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Yours Faithfully
Sek Sophal
Delete "Anyway" (in the first sentence). It is not necessary, and it is too informal.
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