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Hello, i must write a letter cover to apply for an Erasmus Program.
I would like to ask you to check it both its structure and content. Thank you




Dear Sir or Madam,




I wish to apply for an Erasmus exchange in Spain because the chance to study abroad for a few months represents for me an enormous opportunity. Spain is a country which attracts me, due to its culture, its growing economy, but also the mentality of people who live there. I have discussed with several students who have been on the Erasmus programme and all came back delighted, and assure me they enriched themselves un both a personal and professional way.




I am serious, independant, dynamic, organized and responsible. I have a diplome of assistant for children and i work during summer in a youth centre, this work permits me to be more open to the others and to manage a group. Moreover, the idea of being in a new environment to pursue my studies represents for me a real motivation. I have discovered Spanish this year and i have a passion for this language, and i'm looking for a BA programme which wil give me the opportunity to improve my language skills


Moreover, I realized that the best way to master a language is to visit a country to communicate with the inhabitants, and to be confronted with their way of life, as well as their traditions and their culture. To be able to adapt and to develop a broader outlook on the world are, to my mind, two indispensable qualities for my future professional life. Consequently, a semester spent abroad would allow me to acquire a maturity through a different living environment and to discover at the same time another view of studies at a European school.




Thank you in advance for your attention, if you require any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me on my telephone number.








Yours faithfully,
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A few corrections:

... un both a personal and professional way.
*in*

I have a diplome of assistant for children and i work during summer in a youth centre, this work permits me to be more open to the others and to manage a group.
*diploma*
*I* work ...

I have discovered Spanish this year and i have a passion for this language, and i'm looking for a BA programme which wil give me the opportunity to improve my language skills
*I*
*I'm*
*will*

Moreover, I realized that the best way to master a language is to visit a country to communicate with the inhabitants, and to be confronted with their way of life, as well as their traditions and their culture.
* I would replace "inhabitants" with something like "local people".

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