Thank you for your correction of my resume and cover letter

[MW]

Either is acceptable

[RonBee]

Re:

I am a graduate of the Shanghai University, I am applying for the position of assistant in the Human Resource Department.

Say:

I am a graduate of Shanghai University. I am applying for the position of assistant in the Human Resource Department.

Now it is perfect.

[Athena_zhao]

the perfect cover letter

Dear Sir

I am a graduate of Shanghai University. I am applying for the position of assistant in the Human Resource Department.

At one time, I was an assistant to the manager of the Human Resource Department of Huaxin Wire and Cable Limited Company, so I have some experience at that job. Also, my studies at the university gave me some training for that job.

I am a hard-working employee, and I do my best to finish my assigned tasks. I am good at working with others, and I think I would be a good fit for your company. I want to work for an innovative, forward-looking company such as yours.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

Athena Zhao


This time I got a invitation from a foreign company because they read my resume, so thanks all of the teachers gave me the help.

[MW]

It looks like TDOL and the crew deserve a very big congratulations.

You not only helped her with her English, but at the same time made the help very relevent and meaningfull.

Isn't that what it is really all about?

Not just theoretical but "polytechnic"?

Thanks to all who helped.

[RonBee]

I must agree with Athena's assessment of her cover letter.

Would somebody explain polytechnic to me?

[IWANTTOIMPROVE]

City of Houston,


This is Maria Chistina I was married with Mr. John Butry and now I am going through the property distribution process. I have the deeds of the properties but these deeds do not show the prices for which they were bought or sold. I have contacted your office this morning they told me that they could fax me more information if there were mortgages for this properties. This information is vital for my case. I really appreciate your help and kind attention. You can fax me back at :

These are the following address:
please if anyone can help me if this is right

[IWANTTOIMPROVE]

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This is Maria Chistina I was married with Mr. John and now I am going through the property distribution process. I have the deeds of the properties but these deeds do not show the prices for which they were bought or sold. I have contacted your office this morning they told me that they could fax me more information if there were mortgages for this properties. This information is vital for my case. I really appreciate your help and kind attention. You can fax me back at :

These are the following address:


please is this right or or not anyone???

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by IWANTTOIMPROVE

City of Houston,


This is Maria Chistina I was married with Mr. John Butry and now I am going through the property distribution process. I have the deeds of the properties but these deeds do not show the prices for which they were bought or sold. I have contacted your office this morning they told me that they could fax me more information if there were mortgages for this properties. This information is vital for my case. I really appreciate your help and kind attention. You can fax me back at :

These are the following address:
please if anyone can help me if this is right

Punctuation fulfills an important purpose. It helps with clarity. Try:

This is Maria Chistina. I was married to Mr. John Butry, and now I am going through the property distribution process. I have the deeds of the properties, but these deeds do not show the prices for which they were bought or sold. I contacted your office this morning, and they told me that they could fax me more information if there were mortgages for those properties. This information is vital for my case. I would really appreciate your help and kind attention. You can fax me at:

These are the following addresses:

~R