my cover letter and resume

Felix
Room 225, Dormitory 7, NO. 22 ChengZhong Street, JiaDing District
Shanghai, China, 200439
October 16, 2004

Hr manager
nikko
15/F., Block A, Kerry BCI Godown I, 3 Kin Chuen Street,
Kwai Chung, Hong Kong

Dear Hr manager,
I am a student from Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce of shanghai university. I’ve learned your company is a well-known sports products manufacturer providing excellent sports equipment. Nikko’s products are high qualitied and with fashion too, and that is the reason I like your product.
My major is international trade and marketing, and I desire to be a number of your company to contribute to your sales with my knowledge and ability on the marketing and trade area. I think I will be helpful for marketing position. I have taken marketing course, and I have done a business report with my classmates about promoting the SVA TV to the NewYork market. As you can see, I have some marketing experiences, which will be useful for my marketing assistant position.
I will be available for full-time employment after I am graduated at June 2005.
I’ m looking forward to receive your reply, and thanks for your consideration.



Sincerely yours,
Felix


resume
Felix
Room 225, Dormitory 7, NO. 22 ChengZhong Street, JiaDing District
Shanghai, China, 200439

OBJECTIVE
A marketing assistant position

EDUCATION
Bachelor of Global Business
Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce, Shanghai university

RELEVANT COURSE

Global Marketing
Global Finance
Financial Accounting
Microeconomics / Macroeconomics
Financial Accounting
Financial Management
Business Report Writing
International Business
International Law
Commercial Law
International Commercial Law
The Economics of Money, Banking and Financial Markets

WORK EXPERIENCE
International Business Assistant
China shanghai (group) corporation for foreign economic & technological cooperation
June 2004 – August 2004

COMPUTER SKILLS
Skilled at Microsoft Office

LANGUAGE ABILITY
Fluent in English, CET-6

SELF- ASSESSMENT
Independent, Honesty, keeping a harmonious and friendly relationship with classmates, carefulness, confidence, tenacity (not to give up)

[Tdol]

Dear Hr manager,

I'd say 'Dear Sir or Madam,'.

Originally Posted by tdol

Dear Hr manager,

I'd say 'Dear Sir or Madam,'.

yeah, looks better
thanks

[Tdol]

shanghai university. I’ve

Capital letter for names and don't use contractions in formal writing.

[bmo]

Originally Posted by felix123

I am a student from Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce of shanghai university. I’ve learned your company is a well-known sports products manufacturer providing excellent sports equipment. Nikko’s products are high qualitied and with fashion too, and that is the reason I like your product.
My major is international trade and marketing, and I desire to be a number of your company to contribute to your sales with my knowledge and ability on the marketing and trade area. I think I will be helpful for marketing position. I have taken marketing course, and I have done a business report with my classmates about promoting the SVA TV to the NewYork market. As you can see, I have some marketing experiences, which will be useful for my marketing assistant position.
I will be available for full-time employment after I am graduated at June 2005.
I’ m looking forward to receive your reply, and thanks for your consideration.

My try:

1. Capitalalize Shanghai University
2. At June 2005 should be in June 2005.
3. Looking foward to receiving your reply.
4. Nikko's products are high qualitied and with fashion too. (Nikko's products are of high quality and fashionable. Quality is a noun.)
5. Ability on the marketing and trade area. (in marketing and trade area.)
6. I think I will be helpful. (I am confident I will be helpful.)
7. Taken marketing courses.
8. I like your products.
9. I desire to be a number of your company. (I would like to be considered for a sales position... a number of is a typo.)

the people in this forum is helpful!
thanks to all the guys :grin:

what o you meen , i don't understand .

what do you meen , i don't understand .

[Tdol]

marketing experiences

This should be 'marketing experience'