Please help me modify the cover letter and resume

Dear Sir or Madam:

Application for the position of Pharmacy Manager

My interest in the above position you advertised in webs has prompted me to send my resume for your evaluation.

I am an independent worker but also play well in team, and I enjoy very much every aspect of the services involving health care products and programs. I believe that I am capable to take the responsibilities of this managerial position.

I look forward to hearing from you for the schedule of an interview at your earliest convenience. Thank you for your consideration.
Yours sincerely

Robin Zhu


Robin Zhu
Room 502 Building 96
Mei Long San Cun Jiacuan Road, Shanghai 200237
(021) 64770520 Mob: 13917865120 E-mail: EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

Qualifications

Skill in FLASH, DREAMWAVER, FIREWORKS, PHOTOSHOP, ACCESS, 3DMAX, C Language, OFFICE and CORALDRAW, etc.Passed National Computer Rank Examination (NCRE 3rd Rank)

Ability to write successful business analysis report both in English and Chinese.

Good command of English both in writing and speaking, passed CET 4.

Strong capacities of creating and presenting business presentation.

Confident and conscientious; team-oriented and work well under pressure; easily adjust to the new environment and handled with interpersonal relationship.

Education

Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce, Shanghai University Shanghai, Jia Ding

Bachelor Degree in International Economic and Trade expected June 2005
University of Technology Sydney

Diploma of International Trade, June 2003, and certificate IV in English Studies-SILC Program

Relevant Coursework

Macroeconomics Microeconomics
Essentials of Econometrics Accounting
Cameralistics International Settlements
Statistics International Trade Theory
International Trade Practice Marketing
Organization Behavior Economic Laws
Management Information System

Experience

Diwan Management Consulting Co., LTD. (Member of Diwan, Ernst & Young Group) Shanghai
Interpreter, Worked as internship to deal with translating American Publication 550 about investment income and expenses including capital gain and losses, 2003.12~2004.3

China Computer College Shanghai
Lecturer, responsible for teaching Flash5.0, 2002.10~2003.1

Pingjie Office Appliance Limited Company Shanghai
Summer Intern, have designed some jackets of product and webs, 2002.6~2002.8

Wen Xing gift shop Shanghai
Administrative Assistant, aided shop owner in operating and marketing, 2001.11~2002.3

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Application for the position of Pharmacy Manager

This doesn't work for me. However, I must say that I am a British English speaker. I'd say 'I am writing to apply for position xxxx advertised on your website'.

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you advertised in webs

advertised on the Internet
advertised on your website

These would be more appropriate. 'in webs' is incorrect, IMO, and 'on the web' too informal.