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Room 203 No.3 Lane162
Yanchang Road
Shanghai 200072
P. R. China

Alcatel
54 Rue La Boetie
Paris 75008
France

Dear HR Manager,
As soon as I saw your recruiting information I began to write this letter and to apply for being one of employee in your Marketing department of Shanghai office.
I’m a college student majoring in the economics and trade and I will graduate before next spring. I live in Shanghai and I know that your company is very successful in China. You are The No. 1 telecommunication facility supplier in the world with gaining a 16.5 billion Euro in 2002, and covering more than 130 countries. All of this attracts me to try to work for you and to realize my value with the development of Alcatel in China.
I’m vigorous and have the fresh knowledge about marketing, fluently in English speaking and master computer operation. So I’m sure I will satisfy your requirement. Asian Market is very important for you; it takes 19% of your world market and has exceeded your North America market’s 18% to be your second biggest market in the world. I’ve finish my internship in Alcatel China Investment Co. Ltd this summer, and I ‘m sure I can be qualified for the position in Marketing department. I’ll be your right choice.
I’m looking forward to the interview and to give you more my personal information. Please contact me through 13761156158.


Yours sincerely


Penny Lee




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Penny lee

Room 202, 162Lane, Yanchang Road
Shanghai, China 200072
Phone: (021) 56383318, Mobile Phone: 13761156158, Email: EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

SUMMARY OF QUALIFICICATIONS
● Interpersonal Communication ● Supportive and Responsible
● Computer literate: Microsoft Office, Windows XP Professional, Microsoft Project, Have ability to make front page, computer hardware operation.
● Fluent in English speaking, reading, writing.
Relevant certificate:
Certificate of State College English Test-Band 4 (CET-6), June 2004
Certificate IV in English studies—SILC Program, June 2003
Diploma of international trade, June 2003
RELEVANT COURSES WORKS
● Marketing, such as making business reports, making business strategy plan.
● Basic Economy Laws ● Corporation Finance ● Bank Management ● Basic Accounting,
● International Import and Export.

EDUCATION
Sydney Institution of Language and Commence (SILC), Shanghai University
Diploma of International Trade to June 2003
Sydney Institution of Language and Commence (SILC), Shanghai University
Bachelor degree of International Business and Trade to June 2005

WORK EXPERIENCE
Alcatel China Investment Co., Ltd.
Executive Assistant
Being Responsible for going through the formalities of closing Alcatel China Limited Shanghai Representative Office, Translating and many other affairs.
July ~August 2004
Shanghai Wicresoft Co., Ltd.
Intern as the ITG Department manager assistant
Being Responsible for hardware allocating for the whole company
Dealing with customers’ simple questions of the software
June ~July 2002

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As soon as I saw your recruiting information I began to write this letter

This sounds a bit overenthusiastic to me.

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Dear HR Manager

I wouldn't use this.

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