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Old 17-Oct-2004, 12:18
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Mr. Tim Miller,
I got the information from www.standardchartered.com that your bank will hire a group of Management Trainees. These trainees will get professional train in the future. I am very interested in the position. and believe that my education background is appropriate for the position.

I am a graduate of Sydney Language and Commerce Institute, Shanghai University. I major in International Economic and Trade. My relevant courses are Marketing, Business Communication, Business English, Financial management, and the management of commercial banks. I got good marks in these courses. Besides that, I had used to be the trainee In Shanghai and Paris International Bank and Bank of China, so I think I have full qualification of this position.

Enclosed is a copy of my resume, in which is more fully details of my qualifications for the position.

I look forward to receiving your return E-mail as soon as possible, and I have well prepared for any interview of your bank.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,


Michelle Zhang

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MICHELLE ZHANG

PERSONAL INFORMATION

Room 402 No.1 Lane 430 Liangcheng Road
Shanghai, CO 200434
P.R.China
Home phone: 65298775
Mobile Phone: 13916499355
E-mail: EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

EDUCATION

2000-present Bachelor of economic, International Economics and Trade Shanghai University, Sydney Institute of Language and
Commerce, Shanghai, China
2003 CET-6
2002&2004 the third scholarship of Shanghai University
2002 passed the written tests of ATIA/ATII
2001 won the first prize in Shanghai chorus competition of college students
1993-2000 Yichuan Middle School, Shanghai, China
1999-2000 the best leadership of students union
1998 won the first prize in Shanghai opera competition
1999 won the third prize of scholarship
2000 won the third prize in Shanghai typing competition

OTHER TRAINING

2001-present learning Deutsch in Shanghai Foreign Language School
1994-2000 learning Kunqu Opera in Yichuan Middle School
1998-1999 learning Oral English in Shanghai Foreign Language
School
1994-1997 accept typing training in Yichuan Middle School
1986-1996 learning piano in Shengyin Art School

WORKING EXPERIENCE

2004.6-2004.8 Business development depart in Shanghai Yangpu branch bank of Bank Of China
2002.6-2002.7 Customer and Service department in Shanghai and Paris International Bank

OTHER SKILLS

Typing: A
Languages: fluent in Chinese and English, a little Deutsch
Computer: I have lots of experience in Office 2000, Dreamwaver Flash, Fireworks, and Project 2000



REFEREES

Sun Lei Chen Zhi
the manager of BD department in BOF the manager of C/S department in IBPS
1128 Pingliang Road 528 South Pudong Road
Shanghai,200090 Shanghai, 200020
P.R.China P.R.China
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Mr. Tim Miller,
I got the information from www.standardchartered.com that your bank will hire a group of Management Trainees. These trainees will get professional train in the future. I am very interested in the position. and believe that my education background is appropriate for the position.

I am a graduate of Sydney Language and Commerce Institute, Shanghai University. I major in International Economic and Trade. My relevant courses are Marketing, Business Communication, Business English, Financial management, and the management of commercial banks. I got good marks in these courses. Besides that, I had used to be the trainee In Shanghai and Paris International Bank and Bank of China, so I think I have full qualification of this position.

Enclosed is a copy of my resume, in which is more fully details of my qualifications for the position.

I look forward to receiving your return E-mail as soon as possible, and I have well prepared for any interview of your bank.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,


Michelle Zhang

Enclosed

MICHELLE ZHANG

PERSONAL INFORMATION

Room 402 No.1 Lane 430 Liangcheng Road
Shanghai, CO 200434
P.R.China
Home phone: 65298775
Mobile Phone: 13916499355
E-mail: EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

EDUCATION

2000-present Bachelor of economic, International Economics and Trade Shanghai University, Sydney Institute of Language and
Commerce, Shanghai, China
2003 CET-6
2002&2004 the third scholarship of Shanghai University
2002 passed the written tests of ATIA/ATII
2001 won the first prize in Shanghai chorus competition of college students
1993-2000 Yichuan Middle School, Shanghai, China
1999-2000 the best leadership of students union
1998 won the first prize in Shanghai opera competition
1999 won the third prize of scholarship
2000 won the third prize in Shanghai typing competition

OTHER TRAINING

2001-present learning Deutsch in Shanghai Foreign Language School
1994-2000 learning Kunqu Opera in Yichuan Middle School
1998-1999 learning Oral English in Shanghai Foreign Language
School
1994-1997 accept typing training in Yichuan Middle School
1986-1996 learning piano in Shengyin Art School

WORKING EXPERIENCE

2004.6-2004.8 Business development depart in Shanghai Yangpu branch bank of Bank Of China
2002.6-2002.7 Customer and Service department in Shanghai and Paris International Bank

OTHER SKILLS

Typing: A
Languages: fluent in Chinese and English, a little Deutsch
Computer: I have lots of experience in Office 2000, Dreamwaver Flash, Fireworks, and Project 2000



REFEREES

Sun Lei Chen Zhi
the manager of BD department in BOF the manager of C/S department in IBPS
1128 Pingliang Road 528 South Pudong Road
Shanghai,200090 Shanghai, 200020
P.R.China P.R.China


I think you mean "references" here, not "referees".

I would list your work experience before your education.

It's better, I think, to just say "SKILLS". You don't have to say "OTHER SKILLS".

The same thing goes for "training". Just write "TRAINING". "OTHER" - Using "other" is not necessary.
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2001 won the first prize in Shanghai chorus competition of college students
1993-2000 Yichuan Middle School, Shanghai, China
1999-2000 the best leadership of students union
1998 won the first prize in Shanghai opera competition
1999 won the third prize of scholarship
2000 won the third prize in Shanghai typing competition

Do we need all of these? This one means almost nothing to me:
1999 won the third prize of scholarship (what for?)

Including all these awards pushes your work experience further down the page. Couln't you have a separate section for them if you want to include them?
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