Ann's cover letter and resume

COVER LETTER
Room 504 No.3 Cheng Nan Rd,
Pudong New Area, Shanghai, 201200 P. R. China
Post Code: 201200
Tel: (021)-58925477
Mobile phone: 13122038668
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Jin Shi Business and trade Co, limited
Room 1903 No 521 South Wanping Rd, P. R. China,200000
021-64644471
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Dear Mr. Huang:
I am writing to express my interest in your recently advertised position for a Marketing Manager in your Shanghai Offices, which published on the website (http://www.01job.cn/asp/qiyedetal.asp?qiye=judy). Enclosed with this letter is my resume, which further details my previous work experience and qualifications.
I am a fresh man that will graduate from Shanghai University, who is majored in International Trade, in June 2005. My personality is well suited to working as a marketing manager. I am an ambitious, creative, hardworking, and flexible person, although I am a new fresh man, I can fit the environment and grasp all the relative knowledge from daily work quickly. This position must be a challenge that could give me chance to apply my expertise and realize my personal value. I know, your company is one of the largest drink companies in the world. It represented in more than 38 countries, so I am keen on joining your company and becoming one member of the creative team sincerely.

RESUME

Ann Lin
Room 504 No.3 Cheng Nan Rd,
Pudong New Area, Shanghai, 201200 P. R. China
Post Code: 201200
Tel: (021)-58925477
Mobile phone: 13122038668
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Objective
Seeking position of Marketing Manager of Jin Shi Business and trade Co, limited

Summary of Qualification
Good knowledge of interpersonal communication
Computer literate: Microsoft Office, FoxPro, and C++
Native Chinese speaker with satisfactory English speaking, listening, writing and reading skills
Got the Certificate for State College English Test (CET)- Band 4 in September 2003

Education
Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce (SILC) Shanghai University Shanghai, China
Diploma of International Trade, June 2002

Experience
Work as a seller for Shanghai Pispi digital and science company limited in Augest,2004
Work as a seller for Shanghai Sikainong cosmetic makeup toiletry company in May,2004

[Tdol]

OK- let's have a look at this.
which published on the website- there are two ways you could do this:

which was published on your website
published on your website

If you use the realtive pronoun 'which', you must include 'was'.

2 I am a fresh man that will graduate from Shanghai University

freshman- one word
as this is formal, I'd way 'who will graduate'

Or, simple 'I will graduate from Shanghai University in XXXX