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Old 24-Jan-2009, 13:15
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Hi,
I am trying to apply for a student exchange program.
I need to write a personal statement – why I want to participate in it.
Here is what I wrote so far (it has to be 1 page max). I hope to find here suggestions for improving it, and corrections if needed.
Thanks!!


Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing to apply for the Student Exchange program the (name of Uni) offers.
I am currently a student in my X Semester of studies in the X faculty at the (Uni). In my
studies I am majoring on X. I achieved great performances in the courses I took so far, and my current GPA is X.

Taking part in the Student Exchange program is very important to me. It seems to me like a great opportunity to enrich my academic studies. I am sure that by taking part in the program, I will be exposed to excellent professors, and modern study methods. Furthermore, I am confident that by meeting students from all over the world, who share my interests in engineering and management, I can discover new ideas, and learn how to approach engineering from different perspective.

I am well aware to the challenges I will face as an exchange student, academically and socially. However, I am confident that my great motivation for learning will help me overcome the difficulties of studying in a foreign country. In addition my great will to experience new culture, and make new friendships will help me to make the most of the program.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I am looking forward to your positive response.

Sincerely,
X.
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Old 24-Jan-2009, 18:16
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Default Re: Important! need help correcting my personal statement

Say:
I am majoring in....
I have received excellent grades....
I am well aware of the challenges...
What is meant by "I will be exposed to excellent professors"?


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