ghostrider0044
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Hi,
I have posted two sets of sample texts containing minute changes of tense and pronoun. Which one is grammatically correct? Please guide.
(1)
look how the colors of life cascade on your heavenly union
embellish those cherished moments, which the Ranbow's sage
craftsmanship has imprinted and bounded together in memories
with everlasting folds of love
(2)
look how the colors of life cascaded on your heavenly union
and embellished those cherished moments, while Rainbow's sage
craftsmanship imprinted and bounded together those memories in
everlasting folds of love
p.s: Rainbow is the name of a business.
I have posted two sets of sample texts containing minute changes of tense and pronoun. Which one is grammatically correct? Please guide.
(1)
look how the colors of life cascade on your heavenly union
embellish those cherished moments, which the Ranbow's sage
craftsmanship has imprinted and bounded together in memories
with everlasting folds of love
(2)
look how the colors of life cascaded on your heavenly union
and embellished those cherished moments, while Rainbow's sage
craftsmanship imprinted and bounded together those memories in
everlasting folds of love
p.s: Rainbow is the name of a business.