hatimhussain
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- Joined
- Dec 11, 2006
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Urdu
- Home Country
- Pakistan
- Current Location
- Pakistan
Please correct my mistakes, if any, in this piece of writing.
1. Joseph would never have traveled by ship, if James, his friend, a seaman in a maritime corporation, had not convinced him.
2. James portrayed the traveling through sea so alluringly that Joseph started thinking why he had not traveled by ship before.
3. “You will enjoy the times when your ship will be tearing away the deep blue water heading towards its destination”, James said.
4. “You will remember for whole of your life the symmetrical flies of seagulls over you, every now and then”, he incited Joseph.
5. “You will have an amazing experience of viewing loads of beautiful fishes of different breeds and colors”, he enticed Joseph.
6. Keeping those fabulous scenes in mind, Joseph boarded the ship. Within an hour or so he had experienced all that was mentioned by James.
7. But soon Joseph realized that James had forgotten to reveal him the harsh times of the sea. Permanent swaying of the ship made
Joseph feel giddiness and he started vomiting heavily.
8. The medical staff present there gave him sleeping pills to make his remaining journey trouble free. In his last moments before sleep James
was conscious enough to lament his decision of traveling by sea instead of by air.
9. After that fateful journey, Joseph always kept himself away even from watching movies about ships.
1. Joseph would never have traveled by ship, if James, his friend, a seaman in a maritime corporation, had not convinced him.
2. James portrayed the traveling through sea so alluringly that Joseph started thinking why he had not traveled by ship before.
3. “You will enjoy the times when your ship will be tearing away the deep blue water heading towards its destination”, James said.
4. “You will remember for whole of your life the symmetrical flies of seagulls over you, every now and then”, he incited Joseph.
5. “You will have an amazing experience of viewing loads of beautiful fishes of different breeds and colors”, he enticed Joseph.
6. Keeping those fabulous scenes in mind, Joseph boarded the ship. Within an hour or so he had experienced all that was mentioned by James.
7. But soon Joseph realized that James had forgotten to reveal him the harsh times of the sea. Permanent swaying of the ship made
Joseph feel giddiness and he started vomiting heavily.
8. The medical staff present there gave him sleeping pills to make his remaining journey trouble free. In his last moments before sleep James
was conscious enough to lament his decision of traveling by sea instead of by air.
9. After that fateful journey, Joseph always kept himself away even from watching movies about ships.