[General] Avoiding wordiness

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osman

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Hi, I try to develop my English. I wonder how to make my below sentence sound more natural. Thanks in advance.

Structural validity of a scale was sufficient but indeterminate in the others.
Structural validity was sufficient in one scale but indeterminate in the others.
A scale had sufficient structural validity but the others had indeterminate.
 

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Hi. I am trying to develop my English. I wonder how [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] I can make my [STRIKE]below[/STRIKE] sentences below sound more natural.

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1. Structural validity of a scale was sufficient but indeterminate in the others.
2. Structural validity was sufficient in one scale but indeterminate in the others.
3. A scale had sufficient structural validity but the others had indeterminate.

I'm afraid I can't help with any of those sentences because I have no idea what they mean. It sounds like technical jargon to me. However, please note my corrections and comment above.
 

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Osman, would you please explain what "structural validity" is?
 

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Hi, I'm trying to develop my English. I wonder how to make my [STRIKE]below[/STRIKE] sentence below sound more natural. Thanks in advance.

The structural validity of [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] one scale was [STRIKE]sufficient[/STRIKE] satisfactory, but it was indeterminate in the others.
Would that work for you?
 

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Osman, would you please explain what "structural validity" is?

Also, what do you mean by "scale"?
I have studied structures but have not heard of "structural validity".
 

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I have studied structures but have not heard of "structural validity".
Google it, and you'll see that it does exist.
 

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Google it, and you'll see that it does exist.

Okay, it is a terminology used in the field of psychology and not structures (engineering).
 

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We shouldn't have to google stuff to figure out what the heck a post is all about.

Why don't we all stop speculating and wait for osman to provide some context?
 
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