Diary - Yesterday, I was in heavy traffic on the way home.

[Maybo]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Yesterday, I was in heavy traffic on the way home. I stayed on a bus for almost two hours and I really wanted to pee. I thought of getting off the bus and took another transport but we were on the highway so it was impossible. After getting off the bus, I ran as fast as I could. Finally I made it to home.

 

[tedmc]

This is an entry from my diary. Please check it and correct any mistakes.

Yesterday, I was caught in heavy traffic (a traffic jam) while on a bus on the way home. I stayed on a the bus for almost two hours and I really wanted to pee. I thought of getting off the bus and took another mode of transport but we were on the highway, so it was impossible. After getting off the bus, I ran as fast as I could. Finally I made it to home.

 

[Tarheel]

@Maybo Try:

I thought of getting off the bus and catching a different one later.

Don't say you were considering using a different mode of transport unless you were thinking about using a taxi (for example).

 

[emsr2d2]

Yesterday, I was stuck on a bus for almost two hours in heavy traffic on the way home no full stop here I stayed on a bus for almost two hours and I really wanted needed to pee. I thought of getting off the bus and took taking another form of transport but we were on the highway so it was impossible. After getting off the bus, I ran home as fast as I could. Finally I made it to home. What a relief!

See above.

I don't see how getting off the bus and finding a different form of transport would have helped. It would probably have made your journey longer, making you even more uncomfortable.
I'm impressed you can run when desperate for a pee!
I deleted what was your final sentence because I needed to make an improvement there. However, note that that sentence wasn't grammatical anyway. It should have been "Finally, I made it home" (note the comma and that "at" is wrong before "home").

 

[Tarheel]

When you say you were caught in heavy traffic it makes it seem like you the one driving, and, of course, you were not.

 

[Tarheel]

@Maybo They are going to throw a party for me when I reach 30,000 posts as Tarheel. You are, of course, invited.

 

[Maybo]

@Maybo They are going to throw a party for me when I reach 30,000 posts as Tarheel. You are, of course, invited.

Wow great! What will we do?

 

[Amigos4]

They are going to throw a party for me when I reach 30,000 posts as Tarheel. You are, of course, invited.

@Tarheel What is your new name going to be?

 

[Tarheel]

@Tarheel What is your new name going to be?

It's going to be the same name. However, before I was Tarheel I was RonBee. (He only had 16,000+ posts.)

 

[Tarheel]

Wow great! What will we do?

There will be cookies, and ice cream, and root beer, and games. And pizza!

 

[emsr2d2]

Respectfully, could I ask you two to take your conversation over to Private Messages? I keep getting notifications that there are new posts to deal with in this thread and then they turn out not to be language-based at all. Thank you.

 

[tedmc]

When you say you were caught in heavy traffic it makes it seem like you the one driving, and, of course, you were not.

I agree that "stuck in heavy traffic" is better. Yes, "caught" seems to imply that one is navigating through the traffic, or maybe not.