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First post here, sorry if I didnt post the whole question as title but this is slightly more complex, please dont hesitate to point me to the right sub section if this is wrong. To put you into context this quote is from a video game that pretends delivering rich and refined writing, while it is my opinion that the overall writing is poor. I am not a native english speaker yet I find a lot of passages pretty hard to read and feel like proper english is not being used.
Following the witnessing of a recent deadly combat scene (less than 10 minutes ago)
''Calisca puts the back of her left hand to her mouth as if to ward away the horror like a poisonous vapor''
Now considering that the horror is visual, does it make sense for the author to compare it to a vapor?
Is ''warding away'' even a thing? I googled it and the only result is ''ward off''
Is it also safe to say that this is unrefined and uncondensed up to a point? 'Put the back of her hand to her mouth' rather than 'veil her mouth' ?
Following the witnessing of a recent deadly combat scene (less than 10 minutes ago)
''Calisca puts the back of her left hand to her mouth as if to ward away the horror like a poisonous vapor''
Now considering that the horror is visual, does it make sense for the author to compare it to a vapor?
Is ''warding away'' even a thing? I googled it and the only result is ''ward off''
Is it also safe to say that this is unrefined and uncondensed up to a point? 'Put the back of her hand to her mouth' rather than 'veil her mouth' ?
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