Erbab
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Hi,
I have written an essay and here are some parts from it. I am preparing for IELTS and trying to improve my writing skills. You may fully proofread it or just give me some clues and I can try to correct them.
"Although the freedom of expressing opinions is an essential part of civilized societies, people should make sure not to hurt others’ feelings especially when it comes to some sensitive topics. For instance, in communities where religious people predominate, artists should be more careful while criticizing fundamental concepts of their beliefs. This is because, people are highly likely to be very sensitive about what they believe and this may create a serious conflict between people and artists. In brief, restrictions on artists which cover some specific subjects may be acceptable when their negative effects are considered. In conclusion, intellectual freedom should be promoted by governments and societies since being open to change makes our world a livable place. However, while producing their artwork, creative artists should be aware of people’s mentality to avoid a possible chaos."
I have written an essay and here are some parts from it. I am preparing for IELTS and trying to improve my writing skills. You may fully proofread it or just give me some clues and I can try to correct them.
"Although the freedom of expressing opinions is an essential part of civilized societies, people should make sure not to hurt others’ feelings especially when it comes to some sensitive topics. For instance, in communities where religious people predominate, artists should be more careful while criticizing fundamental concepts of their beliefs. This is because, people are highly likely to be very sensitive about what they believe and this may create a serious conflict between people and artists. In brief, restrictions on artists which cover some specific subjects may be acceptable when their negative effects are considered. In conclusion, intellectual freedom should be promoted by governments and societies since being open to change makes our world a livable place. However, while producing their artwork, creative artists should be aware of people’s mentality to avoid a possible chaos."
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