Have I made any mistakes?

[Dutch Van der]

Have I made any mistakes?

While evaluating doctoral candidate Adley's treatise, the academic committee discovered entire passages extracted from unfounded sources. Consequently, the postgraduate student was expelled from the university and deemed untrustworthy. The news soon spread among the cohort of researchers, tarnishing his reputation. His colleagues who once respected and regarded him as a brilliant scientist, now derisively speak about him in the university.

 

[tedmc]

1. I would write unacknowledged sources, since it is about plagiarism.

2. I would reverse the order of the words to speak derisively.

 

[Dutch Van der]

Those are spot-on suggestions considering you aren't a native English speaker. I certainly feel that shifting derisively to after him ensures that the reader doesn't skip over it.

 

[tedmc]

Those are spot-on suggestions considering you aren't a native English speaker. I certainly feel that shifting derisively to after him ensures that the reader doesn't skip over it.

I prefer speak derisively about him to speak about him derisively. I think the former sounds more natural and emphasizes speak.

The quoted words are supposed to be placed in quotation marks or italicised.

 

[Dutch Van der]

The quoted words are supposed to be placed in quotation marks or italicised.

You understood what I meant anyway lmao.

 

[Dutch Van der]

Also, should I replace in with at at the very end?

 

[probus]

No, in is fine.

 

[Dutch Van der]

No, in is fine.

Thanks, man.

 

[probus]

Please don't post to express thanks. We have a Thank button. Using it reduces useless clutter in the forum.

 

[emsr2d2]

Those are spot-on suggestions considering you aren't a native English speaker. I certainly feel that shifting "derisively" to after "him" ensures that the reader doesn't skip over it.

As you now know, words you are mentioning or drawing attention to should be in quotation marks.

You understood what I meant anyway. [STRIKE]lmao.[/STRIKE]

There's no need for textspeak/chatlish on the forum. (I doubt you found it that funny!)

Also, should I replace "in" with "at" at the very end?

Again, mark out the words you're asking about in quotation marks. I'm sure you can see how much more readable the post is with them.